批改六級英語作文

Ⅰ 英語作文批改

風的方向的好好煩人的東西會防火櫃 效果好 各方各草泥馬草泥馬草泥馬草泥馬草泥馬

Ⅱ 幫我批改下英語作文，按六級的標准

Drink Driving has been one of the most risky factors to public safety. Every effort should be applied to bring such incidence to the end. We share the responsibility with the authority to fight it.

First, more rigorous law should be enacted to punish those offenders to the maximum. Drink driving brakes laws! Second, law enforcement should carry the most advanced equipment to promptly check the Blood Alcohol Content (BAC) in the suspects. Last but not the least, we, the average citizen, should keep safety in mind all the time. We should watch around and act out in case we catch someone is going to do this dangerous behavior.

In my opinion, it is everybody』 responsibility to promote traffic safety. Increased awareness of traffic safety issues will help to bring a more safe community.

Ⅲ 批改英語作文

這應該是信吧？首先開頭要有時間和DEAR_______。
幾處語法錯誤：good at 只能就doing.（I'm good at sdying）
like to take with classmates（此處缺主語，take應改為talk。）
My deskmate does study hard（does study連續兩個動詞出現，明顯錯誤。應去掉does，study+s。）obey school rules（obey+S）
His charcter isn't sunny,which make him too shy to communicate with people.（連接詞錯誤，如要用which應放在charcter後，此處應用it ，後面的make+s）
he will lose his temper sometimes when meeting some incidents.(此處的will lose不合理，說的是他的性格，也就是平常的狀態。故應用一般現在時（loses)
what I should do to improve our relationship(improve用在此處不是很恰當。應改為make ......better）
結尾處應對他/她表示感謝如：THANK YOU FOR YOUR HELP
祝語
簽名

Ⅳ 求大神批改英語作文

題目有拼寫錯誤

In recent years, more and more people migrate to another country.
批改意見：more and more可以改為 an increasing number of

For instance,some stars,business men and the millionaire migrate to another country.
批改意見：stars, business men和millionaire 的並列性不太強，需要替換。migrate to another country與前文重復，可以替換為choose to immigrate into foreign countries.

What』s the reasons for this phenomenon.
批改意見：沒有問號……what's 應該為what are，注意主(reasons)謂(are)一致的問題。 句子可以考慮修改為What has led to the tend of migration?

First of all ,domestic environment become worse,such as haze weather and sandstorm weather.
批改意見：覺得這個高級詞彙使用上有點泛濫。國內的環境，霧霾天氣，沙塵暴天氣……這里的表達都非常的Chinglish。還不如改成，There is more extreme weather than before over the nation, such as sandstorms and severe smog. severe smog這個是我查BBCnews的表述，感覺比較native

And some big city』s traffic is heavy,population continues rise at the speed of 2 million people every year.
批改意見：還是表達很中國式英語的問題。建議改成The traffic in many cities is in poor condition because of numerous private cars. And the domestic population has started to climb sharply, increasing to 2 million annually.

Secondly,another country』s environment is better. Moveover,their policy of people is more humanized.
批改意見：怎麼都是中文直譯的感覺。要習慣native說話的語序。而且我覺得環境好這個理由有點牽強，畢竟世界上哪裡都有環境好的地方和污染中的地方，考慮替換另外一個理由。moreover拼寫錯誤。後面這一句Chinglish again，令我不禁懷疑這不會是翻譯軟體輔助的吧……而且什麼their policy？從英語角度考慮，這個they根本無從指向。而且這個理由寫得太sharp了，要是中國老師would probably want you to get real bad hurt.- -句子整句大修！考慮修改為Moreover, some foreign countries have better legal system so that indivial rights could be fully respected. 句子意思意會一下就可以了。

So people want to migrate to there.
批改意見：migrate to there低級錯誤。整個表達非常不可接受。For these reasons, quite a few people prefer to migrating to another country rather than staying in their home country。

Last but not the least,many people migrate to another country in order to follow the trend,They think migrate toanother country is also the symbol of reputation and wealth,so do they.
批改意見：Chinglish，不想重復了。Last but not least, many people choose abroad, following the trend of migration, most of whom think that migration is trappings of fame as well as wealth.

In general,I contend the idea that we should stay in China. because China is a friendly country, she is our mother.
批改意見：我只是不喜歡這個句式而已……感覺就是用得太死板了。盡管是標准六級作文句式。我個人認為，語句流暢是很重要的。平時多點閱讀，培養語感。為什麼不喜歡這一句，是因為這個句式和前文的搭配感覺不和諧。……對，不……和……諧……讀起來特別別扭。標點什麼的就不吐槽了。because前後因果關系不強，比較牽強。In general,I contend the idea that we should stay in China because China is our motherland, the most wonderful and historical country ever.

Although she has many disadvantages,we can help her to solve theproblems.And I believe that she will be better in the future...
批改意見：這句話要是批改老師看到了可能會罵一句熊孩子……好吧雖然我不是老師但我已經罵了。除了機器直譯這個蛋疼的東西，就是這兩句話所表達的意思……orz……不吐槽。Yet much else is discouraging，with lots of problems unsolved, our country is definitely worth our devotion to make it a better place.

總評：整篇文章的結構不是很清晰，需要分段，並且使用更多恰當的銜接過度的詞語。第三部分「我的看法」可以寫多一點，因為這篇文章是很清晰的三段式。分析原因的地方內容寫得不是很好，很空洞，沒有什麼實際的原因列出。內容也是很重要的！至於句子一些細節在上邊已經提到了，希望要好好注意！應該要重點表現的第三部分竟然這么短實在是很令人失望。要合理安排篇章的分布。

希望你寫作文可以有更大的進步！

看了很久打了很久，很認真的寫完了。

希望可以採納了哦親~~~

Ⅳ 英語作文 批改

以我來看，有很多錯的字，有很多錯別字。還有語法在很多地方都錯。但我使用美國學校的水平來改。
大概60-65吧

Ⅵ 跪求批改英語作文，CET-4

I was so excited when Iwas admitted to XX College that I picked up my package at once and booked aticket to school immediately.
College is quitedifferent from my middle school which area is the largest I ever seen.
There are so manysorts of courses provide me interests, such as Advanced Mathematics, the Theoryof Chinese Growth, and so on. All of these courses were taught so vividly thatI have to express my thanks to our lovely teachers. Among them, the ComputerProgram Design, an optional course, impressed me the most which I took part inwith full confidence.
What』 depressed mewas the result that I failed to design my program through all kinds ofknowledge learned from class with good combination. Despite of this, it』s mylucky to take part in the class since from which I got the most precious giftfor my future: Combining the knowledge is necessary to learn something truly well.

Ⅶ 求批改 英語作文

刪 a
Should college ecation focus.....

At first,one』s imagination dominates one』s creativity
改成：At first, imagination nurtures one』s creativity

Where you can stay depends on where you think you can
改成：your mind decides where you are

Imagination is a ladder which leads us to the peak of our life.
改成：imagination is THE ladder that leads us to the pinnacle of life
如果你使用which，前面要用逗號隔開

In China, many colleges just focus on the basic facts and knowledge, neglecting what the society really needs, which is a critical reason that Chinese always lack masters and world-famous scientists while in China there are numerous talented teenagers.
改成：In China, many colleges just (focus on the basic facts and knowledge and neglect what the society really needs), which is a critical reason why Chinese still lack masters and world-famous scientists while talented teenagers are not in shortage.
( )內的句子，讓後面的which修飾

Therefore, I made the conclusion that college ecation should focus on cultivating the imagination of students. For instance, professors can just put forward the hot issues for students and leave everything else for college students to investigate and create. Instead of setting up standard answers, professors should take their charge in valuing students』 work and giving constructive advice to students.
改成：Therefore, I conclude that college ecation should focus on cultivating the imagination of students. For instance, professors can just put forward hot issues to students, and let students improvise their own conclusions. Instead of setting up standard answers, professors should only asses students』 work and provide constructive advice to students.

Ⅷ 批改英語作文

craftsmanship，是針對一個人而言的手工藝技巧不能用，第二次用influence拼錯了，society前面加版冠詞，cloning才是克隆原型是clone，cloning作為權一種技術可以看做專有名詞前面不建議加冠詞，pay的是錢pay for的才是花錢的東西，regular作名詞時指人，想說宇宙規律說universe不就好了嗎，life time 是線性的lengthen它會更好，societ不存在的，改成social吧，最後的better沒寫完。整篇語法和詞彙都很低級啊，最好用一些高級一點的詞彙，不一定要很難的，比如both sides就比two sides好得多impact就比influence好得多。第二段第二句整句語法錯誤，可改成it is so helpful for medical treatments that mankind can live a longer life.(so that 和so ... that意思是分別是以便和如此...以至於，medical不能用作名詞)

Ⅸ 求英語六級作文批改

你寫的是一篇文章的全部，還是一部分？
總覺得開頭的很突然，結尾的也很版突然。
開頭權一般總得有點「引入」
結尾，總得有個結論，你寫這篇文章的結論要明確的寫出來，老師改卷子忙，沒空細看。
英文作文就是開門見山，每段開頭或結尾就要有句明顯的總結該段的話，別和中文一樣繞來繞去。有了中心句，再展開論述（理由），字數不夠了再添點例子。。。。。

Ⅹ 求批改英語作文

with percentages of 18.80%, 16.36% and 15.77% in sequence.
要麼把percentages of 去掉 要麼把百分號去掉否則就是重復
in sequence去掉，因為前面已經有followed by了 這里意思又重復了

To talk about Clothing/Footwear, story is different.
顯然用Talking about/of 結構更為規范，story前面的定冠詞也漏了

Italy was the leading country with a rate of 9.00%, while Sweden was lagged behind with a relatively low percentage of 5.40%.
【rate】的用法不能這樣用，應該改成 at the rate of 9:100 這個：號可以換成to
lag是不及物動詞不能用被動 pecentage的問題不再說了。

The other three countries was in between with rates at around 6.50%.
這句話的表達無法理解。between後面有對象的話則必須是A and B. 你的between後面只有一個對象，已經錯了。

Turkey was ranked No.1 the second time with a rate of 4.35%.
建議the second time的the改成a. 表示「再」的意味可以更明確
rank是不及物動詞，用被動，錯。

To draw a conclusion from the table
這個表達很不地道。直接In conclusion乾脆舒服。

percentage is different in each column,
每個豎條百分數據不同。根據這個表達意思。建議改成percentages vary from column to column更好。你的原句少定冠詞就不對，多了又感覺不舒服。

one thing was similar. It』s that consumers in all five countries spent most of their money on the item
可以去掉句號和it's改裝成同位語從句。更為簡潔和有語感