英語四級一句話點評類作文
❶ 請英語高手幫我點評我的這篇英語四級作文，萬分感謝
值得肯定的是,沒有錯誤的單詞,但是病句很多,即句子結構錯誤嚴重.
1.With the development of economy,the gap betwwen the urban and rural areas seems increased(前面那個動名詞根本就缺少句子成分)
2.The urban areas [are] developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.the rural areas are geting worse and worse.
3. is not developing very well
4.so many rural people dont have a good
5.many rural youngers go to the urban areas and there are not many talented ones staying in rural areas.
還有一些句子冗餘,還有一些地方需要橋接下,修改成這樣會好很多:
1.better and better,on the controry,the rural areas ...
2. I think改為in my opinion
3.We should take 改為it should be taken ...,後面再添加一句,so what could we do on earth?
4.Lastly改為 the last one but not at least(最後但不是最重要的一個)
5.最後再添加一句:all in all ,with the efforts of all of people,the gap between the urban and rural areas will be smaller,and disappear finally.
❷ 那位英語大神能用四級的標准點評一下我的作文
15分制的話，來3-4分，語法錯誤源太多。像第一段，students could choose lessons 本來就是句子了，(且不說選課用choose lesson這種不合規矩的搭配），還要加 is 作整句的謂語動詞，是嚴重語言錯誤。而第二段第一句話又是同樣的問題，而且意思也表達不清楚。說明語法完全不通，只看兩句就可以給分了，後面寫得再好也沒用了
❸ 請英語高手幫我點評一下我的四級英語作文（語法、用詞）萬分感謝
Nowadays,more and more people use credit cards instead of carrying a large AMOUNT OF CASH, 沒有說a large of money的，後面也有 Firstly,the people use credit card without a large of money, 不過這句意思上也有點怪 我猜你是說拿了信用卡就不用內帶大量現金了 首先people 前不容用the，when people use credit cards instead of cash,it's more convenient and safe，然後。。。more and more customers use credit cards can rece...有問題,using吧, ...FOR the workers
❹ 請英語高手幫我點評我的這篇英語四級作文（語法、用詞或者其他）萬分感謝
我就不分析內容，幫你看看語法錯誤吧。。。
第一句different kinds of recreational activities around our life 沒有動詞啊。。。。汗。。。印象分倍減。。。
There are many recreational activities in our life and it can make us so happy 前面是activities後面是it。。。不一致
.People who always in work can take part in recreational activities to relax their self and people who stay at home all along can take part in it to enrich their life. at work .themselves. 前面是activities後面是it。。。又不一致
we shouldn't work、study or stay at home all the way,we must take part in recreational activities to make our body relax情態動詞用的有問題
But every coin has two sides,recreational activities is no exception and in another word ,it still has negative aspects.本來不說內容的。。。但是。。。這句全是模板堆砌的。。。記住，一句話可以有模板，但必須要包含主題考官才可以忍受。。。要是一句話都你這樣，考官直接認定你堆砌字數
the students who take part in many recreational activities may effect their stud 參加啊娛樂活動的學生會影響他們的學習？？？應該是學生參加（過多的）活動會影響學習吧。。。
many people can't limit the times in play and it will rece the times of rest. 前半句太中國英語了，後面times 。。。怎麼有s???
十五分的滿分這個估計就只有六七分。。。小錯誤太多了
推薦你背一下星火英語的四級作文50篇吧。。。關鍵是背整體的行文結構，模板看一下即可
❺ 請英語高手幫我點評一下我的四級作文（語法、用詞)
" Mute English"among Chinese students
A phenomonon of "Mute English"appears among Chinese students because they can't TALK IN English to with their classmates ,friends and foreigners.
There are two reasons for this situation.First ,most of Chinese students STUDY English for their examinationS ,they pay more attention to written testS and neglect of spoken language .It is a failURE to ChinA'S ecation .SecondLY ,many Chinese students are so shy and unconfident in English class THAT they always LISTEN carefully ,but not put up their hands to answer teacher's questions .
If the Chinese students solve this problem ,as I see it ,they must cover the following points:first ,don't study hard for examiationS,but FOR the konwledge; secondLY,they should pay attention to spoken lanuage ; AT last,if they meet the foreigner in A supermarket or A restaurant ,they should talk with the foreign people boldly.
In a word,learning English or another foreign lanuage is AN interesting THING ,not a burden.WE shouldn't study only for examinationS.
❻ 英語四級出彩的作文句子
21. A and B share certain characteristics of form while differ in their ways of looking at the inner reality and developing a plot.
雖然A和B在形式上有某些共同之處，但是在審視內心世界和展開情節方面卻各不相同。
妙筆賞析：兩種事物的異同點對比，通過while（然而）連接，形成結構對比；然後通過share和differ一對反義詞的運用形成語義對比。
22. Most, if not all, essays are made up of the beginning, the body and the end.
即使不是所有的，至少大多數文章是由開頭、正文和結尾組成。
妙筆賞析：if not all經常跟在most, some, part等詞後作插入語，起到減緩行文節奏和豐富表達方式的作用。
23. The beginning rouses the reader's interest in and secures his attention to the subject matter of the essay.
這個開頭引起了讀者對文章主題的興趣，並保證了讀者關注這一主題。
妙筆賞析：本句兩短語rouses the reader's interest in和secures his attention to共用一賓語the subject matter of the essay，難度遠遠大於兩個動詞共享一賓語，運用巧妙，行文簡潔。
24. Proportion is as important to an essay as it is to a painting.
比例之於文章如同它之於繪畫一樣重要。
妙筆賞析：本句結構為 Sth is as + adj. to A as it is to B (某物之於A如同它之於B一樣......); 本結構類似於 A is to B what / as C is to D (A之於B如同C之於D); 前後結構對稱，如同一句古詩。此結構的恰當運用有助於增添文采。
25. Foreign trade is beneficial to and indispensable for all nations.
對外貿易不僅有利於各個國家，而且是必不可少的。
妙筆賞析：本句兩短語is beneficial to和is indispensable for共用一賓語all nations;運用巧妙，行文簡潔。
26. They present their ideas in an impressive and convincing manner.
他們用給人以深刻印象和令人信服的方式展示自己的觀點。
妙筆賞析：作者用present、impressive和convincing等正式詞彙表現出主語「they」真誠態度。
27. Under one of the trees stood her parents who, while keeping an eye on her, were examining the milk-white blossoms with great interest and admiration.
她的父母站在一棵樹下，一邊照看著她，一邊饒有興致和滿懷贊賞地察看那些乳白色的花朵兒。
妙筆賞析：本句為完全倒裝句。主語為her parents,謂語為stood。因為主語後有一who引導的定語從句（一直到句尾），為了避免頭重腳輕，固使用倒裝句，同時也起到強調地點狀語under one of the trees的作用。
28. Repetitions, for instance, lay emphasis on an idea.
比如說，重復強調了一種觀點。
妙筆賞析：lay emphasis / stress on「強調」，經典短語，值得學習模仿。
29. Instead of beginning a sentence with a noun or a pronoun as subject, one may well start out with an adverb or an adverb clause.
一個句子可以一個副詞或副詞性從句開頭，而不是以一個名詞或代詞作主語。
妙筆賞析：本句以一個副詞短語開頭，「不走尋常路」；其次，本句用兩個同義詞短語beginn... with和start out with表達相同語義，避免了用詞重復，單調。
30. He had no strength to walk, let alone run.
他沒有力氣走路，更不用說跑了。
妙筆賞析：let alone「更不用說」，「遑論」；近義表達法：to say nothing of, not to mention
❼ 請英語高手幫我點評我的英語四級作文（語法，用詞）非常感謝
1, 第二句中：are opened for free.
2,it has a purpose ? 此處最好用，There's a purpose 或者直接用狀語從句：nowdays more and more museums are opened for free to attract the people ,especially the students to visit them ,which show the culture relics and the society's develop.
3."It is a beneficial activity."已經下結論？應該是 many people think .....
4 ,free admission have ? 單復數
5，第三段第一句為廢話
6，it will lead to the order in mess,中應為 lead the order in mass
7,the public environment is also a serious problem that a part of visitors always throw away the plastic bottles and papers everywhere能看出我哪裡改動來了嗎？
8 So many workers who work in the museums think that the museums shouldn't opened freely. 中 who work in 去掉，將後面的shoudn't 中的not 提前為，don't think that 後面為肯定句。
9 I think the museum should open freely ,but it can limit the quantity of people every day. BUT 改為AND can -MAY .
10 最後一句中，who 應該去掉，visiting 已經是後置定語。後面的museums去掉。
如果總分25分的話，可以得12分左右。 主題不清晰，是一大問題。
❽ 寫一篇關於評論英語四級的英語作文
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❾ 請英語高手幫我點評我的這篇英語四級作文。（語法和用詞）萬分感謝
不要老用nowadays 感覺很傻。並且不要寫這么又長又不通順的話 一句話包含了兩個意思 就拆成兩句話寫。
可以這樣寫。
Currently, more and more college students chooses to travel on their own rather than travel packed by traveling agency.This is because they want time to relax.
第二段以一句話 改成被動語句。
Freedom would be released if the self-traveling has been chosen.
第二句話
The travelers can manage the touring time arbitrarily without any consideration on time limit.
不要寫at last， 就Thus, more time will be given for people to take photos and enjoy the scenery.(這句話接在第二句後面 都是講的時間 並且這個是沒有時間限制的一個結果。真是 邏輯真混亂)
然後再Moreover, travelers can buy stuffs without the orientation imposed by the travelling agency.This will maximize the benefit of the travellers.不要老是they.... 而且這句話一點都不通順
As to me可以刪了. 一看就是很不專業的用法。 什麼As known to all啊 這些詞語 在寫作盡量不要用 看著很低級。
直接 However， I prefer... 不要it, this都要好點。。 pleasure改成happiness
差不多這些。 寫作還是要注意一個邏輯。 當然語言是慢慢訓練過來的 大學了 寫作要擺脫中學老師教的那種思維 還有那些弱智般的詞彙。