英語雅思批判作文

⑴ 各位英語大神，我是雅思考生，寫作不強，能不能幫忙批改這篇作文，再問一下，這作文能不能5或5.5分啊

你寫一邊倒，寫點利再寫弊，整個邏輯更完整。題目是食品生產機械化，添回加劑什麼的雖然給答生產效率產量什麼帶來明顯增長，但是過度使用會危害人身體健康，也有可能導致勞動力過剩。感覺你寫勞動力過剩的比重有點大，所以你前面可以先寫點這個帶來的好處。5.5可以。

⑵ 雅思英文作文（只需150字左右）。要求精闢，有深度。

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Who should be most responsible for children's ecation? Give your opinion and reasons for it. You should write at least 250 words.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Sample Answer
It seems to me that there is a clear-cut answer to this question. Although in the early years of a child's life parents are the principal ecators, that role is soon assumed very largely by the child's teachers. Even elder brothers and sisters, who may give good advice, can never take the place of teachers in molding a child's mind.
First and foremost, teachers know best in terms of ecation. They are professional ecators, and as such they are better equipped with expertise in teaching. It is in schools, too, that children make friends and learn how to act in a socially responsible manner. Teachers know best how to organize, motivate and discipline their students. Furthermore, as children spend most of their time in schools, teachers have more influence on them than their parents do.
Parents, on the other hand, are mostly either too busy to spend time with their children, or are ignorant of the right way to ecate them. This is not to say that parents can shirk (refuse to take) their responsibility for ecating their children. Parenting is an important factor that shapes competency and character formation in children. Failure to take such responsibility constitutes delinquency as parents.
Nevertheless, given the professional qualifications of teachers and the time they spend with their students, it is clear that the overwhelming burden of ecating children falls upon the shoulders of teachers.

⑶ 英語作文:大學生是否應該評論老師，批評老師

自己改動一下就行了
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http://www.rrting.com/English/yyxw/這里有近千篇英語作文，以後作文都不怕了。希望能幫到你，要給分喔

⑷ 求一篇雅思的英語作文

Should ecation and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

The improvement of the life level e to the economic development has led people to focus more on their spiritual life, with their ecation and healthcare inclusive, but who has to be responsible for the cost of ecation and healthcare has been raised onto heated discussion.

Health care and ecation, two of the basic elements in social life, are always in the concern of the public. Some people suggest that the service in these two fields should be paid by the government and be free to the public; while others believe it to be the ty of the people to pay on themselves. As to me, the coverage on ecation and healthcare should be made the ty of the government while leaving some special demands to be burdened by indivials.

Government free provision of ecation and healthcare can demonstrate their responsibility in serving the people. Having fulfilled their obligations to the country in the form of taxes, citizens have the right to enjoy the service in return from the government, with ecation and health care being the two basic ones. Also, as the ty carrier in promoting social development, by guaranteeing the right of ecation and health care, the government are enabled to encourage citizens to make more contributions to the society.

Government』s investment on these two fields is beneficial to ensure social equality. Being free of charge, every citizen can take advantage of these social services, without the worries about being treated unfairly e to their lack of social resources, such as their social status and human network. Besides, this will be helpful to rece the difference between the rich and the poor, at least in these two basic rights, creating a more harmonious social atmosphere.

Admittedly, if the citizens are wealthy enough, or when they demand some special service, or when the government is too limited in its budget, indivials』 sharing some of the cost may also seem to be reasonable. However, rare cases of particular requirements do not represent the general pursuits of the public, and limitation in budget does not free the government of its accountability.

To sum up, government should provide free ecation and healthcare to the public and pay the cost. Only when people are better ecated and healthier in physiques, can the society be more harmonious in atmosphere and dynamic in development.

這是我在雅思救星上看到的一篇雅思作文範文，相信對你有用，你也可以去看看其它的範文。

⑸ 求大家來批判一片雅思大作文

看第一段感覺有6-7分，第一句時態改成完成時比較好，many people have realized...
第二段就雲里霧里了，錯誤不少
比如「 they can learn faster and better easily than」 語意重復了
」We can found「 can後接原型find
classmate換成student
「 the talent will be more self-confident and self-esteem」不是talent自己自信，是讓人自信。
第三段，There is an old saying，雅思作文中不要用諺語名言之類的句子。
Some 「disable people」—— 用disabled
「Talents are not everything as some factors play significant role」 估計你想說not as essential as...
你這句話有兩個動詞== 至少要用playing吧 ，roles，
好吧，as表原因時前面加個逗號
become a normal one，還有normal是正常，不畸形沒毛病的意思，這里ordinary比較好。
結尾 even though和but不能同時用，加個逗號；fortune不可數；」put into consideration「用這不合適

這篇文兒差不多有5分，很多地方表達不夠准確，更別說地道了；你知道的句型很多，但是用的不靈活，幾乎每一句都能挑點兒錯出來；指代有的地方不明確；詞彙深度還可以。

重點補補語法吧，簡單句寫准確了再練復雜句；
每寫一篇essay，先自己檢查，再找專業老師修改；
還有多看看考官的範文（劍橋雅思書後灰底兒的model answer）
祝好運

⑹ 求雅思作文批改，有什麼缺陷，大概多少分，謝謝

4.5分以下。
模版痕跡嚴重，無意義的模版套句太多。
字數不足，217字。
不分段，邏輯混亂。

語法非常薄弱，幾乎每個句子都有語法錯誤，有幾個句子不成句，例如最後一句，還有些整句看不懂什麼意思，中式思維的英語。

簡單改一些最基礎的mistakes：
encantion --- ？？ecation？

A intensive-- an

be highest ----最高級前面必須加the，而且這句話太中式英文了，一般理解為身高最高。改為be the most excellent.

make themselves more competitiveness --- competitive

phenomenons--- 此單詞復數為phenomena

there are some people argue that --- there are去掉，或者argue改成arguing

dis advantages--- 是一個詞，不要分開寫，disadvantages

總的來說，主要是語法的問題，需要從語法方面入手，從基礎開始，先寫簡單句，確保每一句都沒有語法錯誤，分數會大大提高。注意主謂賓，可數名詞和不可數名詞，單復數問題，還有前後搭配，單詞拼寫，詞性錯誤，時態一致。

⑺ 求一篇英語雅思作文

一、雅思大作文開頭：
開頭要短小;要有立場和觀點;避免模板。
如： the amount of advertising on TV be increased or decreased?
Nowadays many people discuss whether we need …or not.
Now whether…. has become a very hot debate in society.
As far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions. Some people think that ……Others believe that …... I think both views have their reasons.
Recently the ... has been brought into focus ... Nowhere in history has the issue been more visible. In this essay, I aim to explore this complicated phenomenon from diverse perspectives, identify the relevant contributing factors and bring up some effective measures.
二、雅思大作文結構：
一個paragraph一個idea;避免過多examples, esp personal examples.;段落間的平衡
三、雅思大作文語言：
避免idioms, famous sayings
避免poetic language
Explain your point…then explain it again in a different way
Use 「a mix of longer and short sentences」
以上從開頭、結構、語言等三個方面對雅思大作文的寫作技巧進行了簡單的總結，建議考生們可以根據以上建議，並通過針對性的練習來逐步掌握雅思大作文的寫作技巧，從而在雅思作文考試中取得更好的成績。

⑻ 求一篇英語雅思大作文。關於學生學習國際新聞同意或不同意的作文。分四段。200詞以上

Children in secondary school study international news as a subject, but some think that』s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today watching news, a means of learning what is happening around the world, has become a way of life to many people. When the value of news is undisputed, an issue of debate is whether it is necessary to include international news as part of school curriculum. I am of the opinion that it will be an enheartening/exciting change.

⑼ 一個英語作文雅思的求一篇範文

可以從個人發展和社會發展角度去探討。
個人有權利追求更好的工作環境和待遇，以及在此專過程中自己水平的更屬大提升；
這些有技術的高層次人才在發達國家工作，有利於更好的發揮自己的特長，從而帶動全社會乃至全人類的發展和進步。
雅思還是要自己多寫多練啦~~

⑽ 雅思小作文，請高人評分啊，本人英文不好，若有語法錯誤請指出

其實，你應該插入圖片。這樣方便大家看。
我的修改如下：
This graph shows the distribution of consumer expenditure by categories in five different countries, including Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in the year of 2002. 首句點明主題
Three categories of expenditure are addressed in this graph: Food, drinks and tobacco serve as the first category, Clothing and footwear as the second category, and Leisure and ecation as the last. 點明三個分類。

下面論述時，先總起句表明觀點，然後再列數據；如，總的來說，第一類消費大大超過其他兩項消費。In general, the expenditure on the first category surpasses the other two. People in... spent...

然後再提一個觀點，如，休閑教育還沒有時裝消費多。然後再列數據。

這樣子寫的話，條理就很清楚了。雅思打分是結構、語句、用詞都要看的。結構清楚了，就算語言用詞不是很精準，分數也會高點。

目前的樣子，結構不明確、論點不清晰、用詞不夠准確。但是句子比較長（即非大量短句) 可理解，現在能夠得5分到5.5分。如果結構清楚了，雖然語句不是很准確，也能拔到6分的樣子。