雅思英語作文批改
㈠ 求助~~雅思作文批改
Hardly can the public reach a consensus on the question whether authorities should be economically responsible for the prevention of diseases or the treatment of patients in current society. I would like to compare these two opinions from the following aspects. (第一段你是套模板的，我就不改了，不過以後還是記得要自己寫，因為太容易看出來了）
Recently, huge amount of money has been invested in public health and medical research departments to ensure the delivery of advanced treating techniques and the availability of free medical services. Evidently, this measure has been approved by a large number of people in that they regard it as a kind of resident allowance donated by the governments and a bridge connecting them with authorities. Furthermore, with the prevalence of free medical services and the application of latest medical technologies, an increasing number of citizens are safe from the serious consequences or side effects triggered by some harmful dieases.
However, many clinical experts, sociologists and economists advise the government should concentrate more on the precaution of diseases and strengthening public health. For instance, stopping environment from being contaminated is a good way to rece the insidence of certain diseases. Moreover, the governments should advocate healthy diet and lifestyles , which are much better than the delivery of post-disease medicares
In conclusion, the government should focus more on disease prevension becuase it not only keeps people healthy, but also releases the pressure of medical institutions.
幫你重寫了後面幾段，提幾點意見吧
1 注意選詞和搭配的得體。你最好多看一些通俗的英文材料，學習一下人家的表達。
2 注意語言的簡潔，
3 不要套模板。
㈡ 求批改英語作文(IELTS)
Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women.
Do you agree or disagree?
Should men and women be equal? This is a much talked about question nowadays. In fact, sex is always a barrier for a woman to achieve their success in her career. I firmly believe that women should be given the same right as men, because they are equally important in all human activities.
First of all, with the rapidly development of society and economy, there have emerged many working opportunities and women are certainly as intelligent as men if they have a same ecation. Therefore, some high-level jobs are more occupied by women than the past. As this result, it proved that women have the same abilities as men. Personally, it is a mistake to base our views on broad generalizations about the abilities of men and women and it should be according to indivial abilities and not focus on the gender.
Secondly, the characteristics of men and women as such stereotypes are often inaccurate. Not all women are bad at business, just as not all men are poor interpersonal communicators. For example, if men are often calm and thoughtfully, but some men are more careless and hesitant than women? Beside, if women are always sensitive, then what would you say when they are insensitive in work or interpersonal. Obviously, there are no absolute advantages when considering their gender.
In conclusion, as a man, I would hopefully see that more outstanding women can be working their favourite jobs and can get their desirable position. Because a person』 indivial ability is far more important than their gender.
㈢ 自己備考雅思考試，作文沒有人批改，每天練習有效果嗎
以下內容希望能幫到你
1、多背、多記、多練習
學習語言沒有捷徑，從單詞到句子，都得花十足的功夫。在背和記的過程中，語感會自然而然地增強，其潛移默化的效果在短期內效果並不明顯，但堅持兩三個月就會感到英語也不是那麼愛和自己過不去。多背多記之後，還是得多寫作多練習。雅思寫作技巧把自己在課堂上的東西先掌握，然後盡量在練習的文章中使用出來，這樣才是真正的屬於自己的東西。
2、培養興趣
雅思考試寫作技巧「興趣是最好的老師」，似乎是放之四海而皆準的真理，也是很多同學初次接觸英語聽到的一句話。帶著興趣去學習，效率高並且不會感覺被動。
3、巧妙分配時間，合理規劃
雅思寫作一共就1個小時，大小分別40分鍾和20分鍾。這個是自行調整的。在備考時，先前把多數精力放在大作文上面，而考前的兩個星期則側重小作文練習，因為短期內小作文拿分比大作文拿分相對容易。注意：准備雅思考試系統規劃是很重要的。
4、避免過度依賴模板
一般，模板套句用得太多太濫，考官見多了也會厭煩，考生拿到高分的可能性也就不是很大。並且，模板很容易限制思維，我們自己想到的很多觀點都被束縛了。我們不應該依賴模板，而是把培養和握好技巧。
5、重視作文批改
即便每天寫作而不做任何回顧分析，也未必見得有進步。其實，之後的老師批改極其重要，著重分析這些錯誤，可以有效的避免重蹈覆轍。雅思寫作技巧在上課和備考過程中寫很多作文，剛開始錯誤百出，但很明顯，隨著時間的推移，常犯錯誤在逐漸減少，這和老師的批改和糾錯有著密不可分的關系。
㈣ 雅思作文批改
看起來是典型的辯論型題目。寫得還是不錯的，不過也許就像你說的那樣，畢竟是第一次寫這種文章，所以技巧性可能還有點欠缺。如果條理再清晰一些的話，就更好了。
個人認為，辯論型題目，以這個題目為例吧，考官最想看到的就是你自己的意見，盡量不要出現模稜兩可的觀點，尤其不要說「It's all depends」之類的話...洋人很反感這個的，盡可能使你的觀點明確。這究竟是積極還是消極的發展，一定要有一個明確的立場，即一邊倒。在文章的第一段，先寫兩句作為背景，實在寫不好的話，就改寫題目，確保不會跑題。然後亮明自己的觀點，最後可以過渡一下，為第二段做准備。一般情況下第一段不要太長，三四句即可。
第二段就是重點了。這也就是你需要重點下功夫的地方。我在前面說了，這部分可能條理不是很清晰。我讀了下你的第二段，其實你有表述自己的理由，但是看起來是不是很沒有頭緒呢？這里就需要用一些詞來連接，比如「First of all」，「next」，「last but not the least」這類的詞，可以讓人很明確地看到你的每一條理由。實際上，每條理由後面加上一兩句，來擴展你的理由，也就是支撐觀點。盡量，不要舉例子，一兩句是說不清的，如果舉也盡量不要舉具體例子。我記得有一個題是關於戰爭的，我看到的一篇範文的觀點是戰爭摧殘人們家園，但是這個考生的高明之處就在於他沒有明確地說就是美國攻打伊拉克。這一點一定要注意，英聯邦的國家很反感別人說他們不好的。
第三段，也就是結尾段了。對於辯論型題目，三段足夠了，但是解釋性題目，即要求提出解決方案的，則需要寫四段。所以可以考慮把你的二三段重新整合一下。結尾段需要再次亮明觀點，這一點你做得很好呢，第一次寫就可以做到這個很不容易的，好多學生最後都草草總結了事了。但是一定要和開頭照應，實際上簡單的做法就是再次改寫題目，或者改寫開頭段。
最後再說一下，你很有心呢，格式做得非常好。但是第一段出現了縮寫，這個在正規的雅思考試里是絕對不允許的，改正就可以了。
我是今年4月，在北京，參加的雅思考試，我的寫作拿了6.5分，我的雅思寫作老師和我一起參加了考試，他拿了7分，所以還是個OK的成績。同學加油吧，也祝你早日通過雅思考試，拿到理想的分數。
㈤ 求雅思作文批改
As the price of residential properties, continues to grow, especially in some developed countires, instead of buying houses, renting appartments has been regarded as an ideal way for more people. And the advantages and disadvantages of this way will be discused as follow.
The pricing advance is undoubtly the most evident for rental properties. Comparing with purchasing houses, especially in metropolises, which costs millions of dollars, the expense of rental properties is significantly lower and more affordable for ordinary families. Besides, renting properties tends to be more flexible as relocation is relatively eassier for the tenants. And e to the flexibility, it sometimes further reces living expense by cutting the related cost, such as transportation, significantly and considerably saving the time which is precious for people living in modern societies.
Nevertheless, the disadvantages of it cannot be ignored. In terms of investment, it is the appreciation of real estates that provides people chances to double or triple their wealth. Therefore, those who are still renting apartments may miss these opprotunities to generate enmorous wealth. Besides, the ownership of residential properties does give people the feeling of psychological satisfaction and filfulment as this kind of ownership, in some countries, means the strong capability in wealth generation, higher social reputation and more degree of freedom. Thus, for indivials who are still renting houses, they are unfortunately unable to experience this sense of satisfaction and sometimes may feel upset or annoyed by some properties related problems such as increased rental expense and fine on delaied rental payments.
In conculsion, the advantages of renting houses includes lower expenses and relative flexibility while the drawbacks include missing the chances of generating more wealth and occurrence of some rental related problems
我重寫了這篇文章，希望對你有幫助。提幾點吧，1開頭段，簡潔一些；2 題目問的是優點和缺點，並沒有叫你說你的看法，也沒有叫討論不同人的觀點啊。建議你看一些國外報紙或者雜志的文章，相信對你的寫作會有幫助
㈥ 雅思作文批改的老師哪裡可以找
我試過環球青藤雅思的寫作批改，是專門的雅思寫作老師來改，可以幫忙回查看寫作情況答，這樣你就可以了解自己在語言表達方面的薄弱處並加以改正。?
另外如果你在學校里有熟識的英語老師，也可以請求他/她的幫忙，吃吃飯聊聊天也是不錯的指導方式。
㈦ 有能批改英語作文的app嗎雅思
同學你好！
你可以登錄朗閣寫作一對一批改頁面進行作文提交批改，名師點評專會通過郵箱反饋給你哦。屬
地址http://www.longre.com/topic_2013/zt/ysnh_1015/zuowen.aspx
㈧ 雅思大作文求批改，求較細修改意見（思路上面也望指點），最好有大概分數預估。。
As a result, certain indivials hold a view that writing letters are fading away even disappearing thoroughly.
建議改詞：hold a view- proclaim claim assert advocate
Personally, I think their view is overly simplistic.
雅思大作文還是寫作規范點好，think要換掉，還要加that
第一段末尾說了自己的觀點，和第二段開頭有點羅嗦。
Also, some persons just love writing,
persons-people
Many people believe that it is better for some feelings conveyed by characters rather than oral way
way加s
some claim letters will disappear thoroughly.
加that, thoroughly 用得太多，可以換成drastically dramatically compeletly
Besides that, even just feelings, such as a kind of hobby, can also keeping indivials writing letters without stop
can also keep without stopping
even e-mails，a common way to communication,
a commom way(access methodology) to communicate
maybe the number of people love writing letters are less than what it used to be
the number of people loving或者people who
總的來說，詞彙量還是不錯的，但是句子上可以較大加強，定語從句使用較多，可以嘗試平行結構，省略結構，插入語等，同時，句子缺少長句，長短句結合不是很好，通常雅思寫作在提出自己一個觀點之後，應當用1-2長短句進行擴展，而不是直接寫下一個觀點。
另外，如果對寫作較為熟練，在時間 字數充足的時候， 開頭請不要使用模版句式或類模版句式， 建議直接寫At present, whether the auto-mobiles will dominate the leadership of the writing letters has became a controversial issue.
我也是雅思新手，不足之處請多指出~謝謝~
㈨ 雅思作文修改～
同學 我不曉得現在的雅思和我高中時候的雅思有沒有什麼變化
但是喃你這篇文章不容易得高分哦 從第一段就看得出來了
雅思的大作文都是這種 給你個話題喊你說你同意還是不同意
注意！是do you agree or disagree哈 所以最好的做法就是
在第一段明確的說出你是agree還是disagree
然後再在後面的段落說to what extent
每段只能包括一個主題 並且開頭都要用一個topic sentence
來說明你這段主要說的是啥子
最後總結一下，注意！總結這部分一定要再次強調agree還是disagree哈
我上了雅思 但是最後沒去考 不過給我們上雅思的外教給我的作文分數一直都是7分
還有我給你說的這些是英語作文的通用格式
不管你是考雅思托福還是公共英語專業英語 作文都要按這樣寫才得的倒高分
下面就看下你的細節問題哈：
maney？打錯了 money吧
companies and the government can both reach this standard,while the scientific research is not easy to be concted.
這句話不咋個好 我感覺有歧義
caring nothing about the development of the country前面加個but
For instance,a beverage company will never try utmost to research nuclear,vice versa這例子舉得不好 沒有說服力 如果實在舉不出來最好不要舉 不然還會扣分
還有很嚴重的一點，應該是on one hand，on the other hand哈 這種太明顯了 會扣很多分的
The paper manufacturers are good example。 example是可數的 加s 主謂賓要一致了嘛
Every day the waste from the factories is mped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.這句話有語法錯誤哦 你要把前面的句改成從句或者分詞結構That every day the waste from the factories is mped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.或者Every day the waste from the factories mped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.
Due to the waste coming from private companies,companies should be responsible for cleaning the polluted rivers. e to 不能這家用哦 雖然它是表原因 但是你這個句子用它不好As the waste coming from private companies,they should be responsible for cleaning the polluted rivers.
重復出現的東西最好用代詞 特別是在同一個句子頭 這樣才符合英語的習慣
以上僅供參考哈 分我就不打了 加油O(∩_∩)O~
我前面不是就已經給你說了嗎？按照那種通用格式寫
然後注意不要有語法錯誤就行了
其實要求並不高的
㈩ 雅思寫作考官批改作文的時間是多久
雅思大作文背黃金模板真的有用嗎?大作文分數為何提不高?雅思寫作考官是如何批改雅思大作文的呢?下面兩篇文章中就用實例為大家講解雅思考官是如何批改雅思作文的.希望對大家備考2012年雅思寫作考試有所幫助! 搜學留學發現,許多學生非常的重視各種「黃金模板」,可是許多同學背了很多的模板,最終的寫作分數卻仍然不理想.在下面的兩篇文章中就用實例為大家講解雅思考官是如何批改雅思作文的,同學們快來看看這些作文中的小錯誤背後都隱藏了什麼玄機吧. 雅思作文這樣批,系列一 很多時候學生會從某某老師那裡獲取種種所謂的「黃金模板」,又或者是高舉考前必備一本,視若雅思界的聖經.而不去管什麼「碰文」.而最最難過的卻是分數不給力,才知天道難酬勤!換個方式學吧,看看隔壁的「他」的作文中那些錯誤的背後是否隱藏了寫作的某些玄機. 請看下面這個小作文的開頭段,看似行文流水,實則欲哭無淚. As can be seen from the table chart, it gives us the percentage of national consumer experience by category in 2002 in five different countries.談及套句,小作文中「As can be seen from…」曾被列為小作文必備佳句,而孰不知此句雖好,但native speaker 常把它放在主體段落開頭句.若論行文習慣,實在勉強.再者,「table chart」必會讓考官在批卷的疲勞中會心一笑.但是烤鴨們,不知啊,你讓他笑,他卻讓你人比黃花瘦,盡管他是那樣的愛你.此短語翻譯成中文叫「表格圖」,考生自是覺得挺有中國風的感覺.但考官會認為是「這table就是表格,也就是圖的一種,還後面要是再加一chart,再來一圖.實為black sheep 一族」啊!南部陳更要翻譯成「表格圖圖」?實在是具有喜感啊!再論「us」一詞,感覺倒是親民派系, 考官考生一家人啊.但是,雅思寫作,半學術文體,這詞總有點較為隨意.所以,寧為被動,隱去施動者,換成it can be seen ,或是it represents that 等句,或許會更好點.考生最無辜的地方就是下面的這個percentage.我們都知道,衣服表格不可能只有全圖一個數據,又怎會遺忘名詞單復數的問題呢?最後那個「in 2002 in five different countries」,感覺起來好似是信息滿滿,不知道是否也是信心滿滿?語法老師告訴我們：當句子中同時有地點狀語和時間狀語時,一般要把地點狀語放在時間狀語之前 .要知道,不走尋常路,那是考官的作風.考生要是也這樣做,哭泣大於微笑. 基於上述段落的分析,不知道同學們是否也會有所收獲?其實開頭段,自是不必非得寫的那叫一個傾國傾城.簡單大方,信息全面,能夠統領全文,那就最好.你,懂得了嗎? 雅思作文這樣批,系列二 People have, in rercent years, shown concern on the dire consequences of global warming and air pollution. Some people suggest that we should limit are travel（travelling） instead of car use. It seems to me that the objection against air travel is based on incorrect facts and stereotypes.（The）Vehicle is an integral segment of urban instrial civilization, mirroring contemporary life, in its best and unrest aspects. Just as machinery is integral to instrialization, air is central to world economy.（有邏輯關系嗎?）Air travels make it possible for people to move around the world freely and quickly. Today, the tips can be completed in a matter of hours. One can attend a meeting in Pairs and dinner in New York the same day. There is a growing recognition that air travels have several advantages, while（連接詞使用有誤,改成mean