change雅思英語作文大全

A. 100分懸賞，求大家幫我看看兩篇雅思英語作文，一篇修改前，一篇修改後

看了你的文章,我終於明白你為什麼在分以下了.

分析一下你的優勢和劣勢:
你的優勢:1, 能夠清楚理解題目含義 ; 2, 有一定的邏輯性和良好的思維能力.
3,有一定單詞量和英文基礎.

你的不足: 1, 應該重點練習並熟悉英文的語句結構,和詞彙用法.雖然你有一定的單詞量,但是你對他們的用法還不夠熟練. 例如:你首段的第一句,就是一個沒有主語的重句.還有第二段第一句中的"reap",用在這里不太恰當,因為"reap"的獲得是作為努力的成果而獲得的,用在這里似乎詞不達意.
2, 覺得你的寫作方式很原創,一看就知道是你寫的.呵呵.因為我個人覺得你的好多話都是你個人臨場發揮的.我的建議是你平時能夠多讀一些文章,熟悉各種詞彙和語句的用法,再把你認為經典的收藏為己用.這樣久而久之,你的寫作自然就有突破.
3, 論證段的語句不要太復雜,盡量簡單清晰.如果太復會有很做作的感覺,反而會對論點起到反作用.我看了你的那篇被改過的文章,就好很多.看起來比較順暢,可讀性強,不蹩腳,得6分綽綽有餘.你可以將其與你寫的進行對比,然後用心去體會他們之間的差別和不同,逐漸改變你的寫作習慣.

總之, 寫作是練出來的,即使像樓上兩位仁兄辛苦的替你改完,不知道對你寫作的真正作用會有多大呢,至少我看不到它的效果,(聲明:詞話絕無冒犯他們的意思). 另外送你一句話,切忌繁冗復雜,崇尚簡單明快.因為你想要的畢竟只是 6分而已 - 希望你能取得真經 :)

B. 修改英語作文！ielts

我考過兩次雅思，作文第一次7.5，第二次7。你這個作文問題挺多的，語法就有不少毛病，軟體翻譯的？結構也不合理，還跑題，題目是是否應該按照傳統模式建房子，你寫的更多是古代建築的好處和缺點。

先說結構吧。你贊成傳統建築模式的觀點，就應該用大量篇幅寫你為什麼贊成。中間三段應該是前兩段寫傳統建築模式的優點，第三段寫傳統建築模式的一些不足。

開頭寫得不好。我覺得還是應套用模板開頭。
The issue whether we should build our buildings in traditional styles is a complex and controversial one. Some people believe that..., while other people assert that.... As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former/latter opinion. （兩個省略號處分別寫兩種觀點）

這段內容還行，但語法太差了。你說了埃及古金字塔的好處，最後還要拐到要求的話題上，說出按古建築模式建房子對現代經濟的影響，即括弧中這句。
It is indisputable that the traditional architecture style and ancient buildings are a civilized symbol for the country .Take Egypt for example,the pyramid is a mystery and precious treasure, symbolizing the witness of ancient Egyptians. In addition ,traditional building structure is not only a symbol but also a platform , on which tourists and local people can communicate with each other. (So, if we build our buidings in traditional styles, more tourists will be attracted to our country, which will greatly increase foreign currency and improve local economy. )

接下來一段應繼續寫傳統建築模式的好處，但可以不用像上面一段那麼多。可以寫很多人喜歡傳統建築的風格，那些建築看起來賞心悅目，建造更多傳統建築物能提高居民的滿意度什麼的。樓主自己寫寫這段吧，當然也可以寫傳統建築其他方面的好處。

這一段該寫缺點了。缺點不宜寫太多，不然豈不是否定自己的觀點了？
On the other hand ,however, some traditional buildings are not tall enough to accommodate many residents as modern skyscrapers are. some people believe that if residents live in morden tall buildings , they can breath fresh air as well as enjoy the comfortable atmosphere .Moreover, it is better to select steel rather than stone to build our buildings for the reason that steel materials can bear a heavier weight of floors and walls.

總算到結尾了。。。。
In conclusion, though traditionally-built architecture has some disadvantages, it plays a great role to reveal local culture and ancient civilization. And I believe that the advantage is well worth the shortage. So we should build our buildings in traditional styles.

樓主這篇作文啊。。。除了字數多，其他真是亂七八糟啊。。。當然我寫的也不完美，大家批判著看。

C. 求一篇雅思的英語作文

Should ecation and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

The improvement of the life level e to the economic development has led people to focus more on their spiritual life, with their ecation and healthcare inclusive, but who has to be responsible for the cost of ecation and healthcare has been raised onto heated discussion.

Health care and ecation, two of the basic elements in social life, are always in the concern of the public. Some people suggest that the service in these two fields should be paid by the government and be free to the public; while others believe it to be the ty of the people to pay on themselves. As to me, the coverage on ecation and healthcare should be made the ty of the government while leaving some special demands to be burdened by indivials.

Government free provision of ecation and healthcare can demonstrate their responsibility in serving the people. Having fulfilled their obligations to the country in the form of taxes, citizens have the right to enjoy the service in return from the government, with ecation and health care being the two basic ones. Also, as the ty carrier in promoting social development, by guaranteeing the right of ecation and health care, the government are enabled to encourage citizens to make more contributions to the society.

Government』s investment on these two fields is beneficial to ensure social equality. Being free of charge, every citizen can take advantage of these social services, without the worries about being treated unfairly e to their lack of social resources, such as their social status and human network. Besides, this will be helpful to rece the difference between the rich and the poor, at least in these two basic rights, creating a more harmonious social atmosphere.

Admittedly, if the citizens are wealthy enough, or when they demand some special service, or when the government is too limited in its budget, indivials』 sharing some of the cost may also seem to be reasonable. However, rare cases of particular requirements do not represent the general pursuits of the public, and limitation in budget does not free the government of its accountability.

To sum up, government should provide free ecation and healthcare to the public and pay the cost. Only when people are better ecated and healthier in physiques, can the society be more harmonious in atmosphere and dynamic in development.

這是我在雅思救星上看到的一篇雅思作文範文，相信對你有用，你也可以去看看其它的範文。

D. 一個英語作文雅思的求一篇範文

可以從個人發展和社會發展角度去探討。
個人有權利追求更好的工作環境和待遇，以及在此專過程中自己水平的更屬大提升；
這些有技術的高層次人才在發達國家工作，有利於更好的發揮自己的特長，從而帶動全社會乃至全人類的發展和進步。
雅思還是要自己多寫多練啦~~

E. 雅思英語作文

建議抄首先可以參加襲北外雅思培訓班，上完課後要整理筆記，總結開頭-主體段落-結論的具體寫法以及常用的語言結構。

考前50~60天，練習句子翻譯考前40天，練習觀點和詞彙：挑選各個專題的話題若干，每天訓練觀點和詞彙構思+段落寫作；

考前30天：以熟練為主，完成寫作訓練。結合上課教授的寫作方法和思路+每天構思得來的觀點——不限時寫作（每兩天一篇）。

考前20天：挑選三種文體的代表作，請老師批改並面授點評，看看問題所在，有針對性提高和改正。

考前15天：限時寫作，每天一到兩篇，提高寫作的感覺和速度。

F. 求一篇雅思英語作文(づ￣ ³￣)づ You are allowed 40 minutes to w

2007年6月CET作文題目
Part I Writing (30 minutes)
注意：此部分試題在答題卡1上。
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Welcome to our club. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given bellow:
歡迎辭，歡迎加入俱樂部。
標題：Welcome to our club
書寫提綱：
1.表達你的歡迎；
2.對你們俱樂部作一個簡要介紹。
2007年12月CET作文題目
Part I Writing (30 minutes)
What electives to choose
1. 各大學開設了各種各樣的選修課
2. 學生因為各種原因選擇了不同的選修課
3. 以你自己為例……
2008年6月CET作文題目
一.寫作部分（9：00－9：30）
Part Ⅰ Writing (30 minutes)
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A Letter of Apology according to the outline given below. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese.
1.娛樂活動多種多樣
2.娛樂活動可能使人們受益，也可能有危害性
3.作為大學生，我的看法。
2008年12月CET作文題目
1. 一次性塑料袋給人們生活帶來便利。 廣為使用。
2.由此帶來的問,舉例子。
3.限制使用塑料袋的意義,理論與實際相結合。
2009年6月CET作文題目
1.越來越多的博物館免費開放的目的是什麼？
2.也會帶來一些問題
3.你的看法

G. 雅思英語作文

建議首先可以參加培訓班，上完課後要整理筆記，總結開頭-主體段落-結論的具回體寫法以及常用答的語言結構。

考前50~60天，練習句子翻譯考前40天，練習觀點和詞彙：挑選各個專題的話題若干，每天訓練觀點和詞彙構思+段落寫作；

考前30天：以熟練為主，完成寫作訓練。結合上課教授的寫作方法和思路+每天構思得來的觀點——不限時寫作（每兩天一篇）。

考前20天：挑選三種文體的代表作，請老師批改並面授點評，看看問題所在，有針對性提高和改正。

考前15天：限時寫作，每天一到兩篇，提高寫作的感覺和速度。

H. 求一篇雅思英語作文~~急用啊！280字左右。

The view of new technology taking place of the old ones.

The new will take the place of the old sooner or later,so in my eyes it is acceptable and normal that the new-born technology has superseded those old ones.In the field of media ,as a matter of fact,more and more people use E-mail instead of writting a letter.Also you could find that newspaper become less popular among the teenagers,they are more likely to surf the internet to get touch with the information around the world.And these days In China the government has already carried out the plan that replace the analog signals with digital signals for TV（模擬信號向數字信號轉變）.You could also find that more and more people are carrying their own laptops to work,and they just become smaller and faster.In a word, the whole world is moving toward a more advanced level,so it is to the technology.It is a rather good phenomena that more and more technologies are born in this world.So it is a unstoppable trend that the new take the place of the old.I think rather optimistic to this question.