英语四级一句话点评类作文

❶ 请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文，万分感谢

值得肯定的是,没有错误的单词,但是病句很多,即句子结构错误严重.
1.With the development of economy,the gap betwwen the urban and rural areas seems increased(前面那个动名词根本就缺少句子成分)
2.The urban areas [are] developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.the rural areas are geting worse and worse.
3. is not developing very well
4.so many rural people dont have a good
5.many rural youngers go to the urban areas and there are not many talented ones staying in rural areas.
还有一些句子冗余,还有一些地方需要桥接下,修改成这样会好很多:
1.better and better,on the controry,the rural areas ...
2. I think改为in my opinion
3.We should take 改为it should be taken ...,后面再添加一句,so what could we do on earth?
4.Lastly改为 the last one but not at least(最后但不是最重要的一个)
5.最后再添加一句:all in all ,with the efforts of all of people,the gap between the urban and rural areas will be smaller,and disappear finally.

❷ 那位英语大神能用四级的标准点评一下我的作文

15分制的话，来3-4分，语法错误源太多。像第一段，students could choose lessons 本来就是句子了，(且不说选课用choose lesson这种不合规矩的搭配），还要加 is 作整句的谓语动词，是严重语言错误。而第二段第一句话又是同样的问题，而且意思也表达不清楚。说明语法完全不通，只看两句就可以给分了，后面写得再好也没用了

❸ 请英语高手帮我点评一下我的四级英语作文（语法、用词）万分感谢

Nowadays,more and more people use credit cards instead of carrying a large AMOUNT OF CASH, 没有说a large of money的，后面也有 Firstly,the people use credit card without a large of money, 不过这句意思上也有点怪 我猜你是说拿了信用卡就不用内带大量现金了 首先people 前不容用the，when people use credit cards instead of cash,it's more convenient and safe，然后。。。more and more customers use credit cards can rece...有问题,using吧, ...FOR the workers

❹ 请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文（语法、用词或者其他）万分感谢

我就不分析内容，帮你看看语法错误吧。。。

第一句different kinds of recreational activities around our life 没有动词啊。。。。汗。。。印象分倍减。。。

There are many recreational activities in our life and it can make us so happy 前面是activities后面是it。。。不一致

.People who always in work can take part in recreational activities to relax their self and people who stay at home all along can take part in it to enrich their life. at work .themselves. 前面是activities后面是it。。。又不一致

we shouldn't work、study or stay at home all the way,we must take part in recreational activities to make our body relax情态动词用的有问题

But every coin has two sides,recreational activities is no exception and in another word ,it still has negative aspects.本来不说内容的。。。但是。。。这句全是模板堆砌的。。。记住，一句话可以有模板，但必须要包含主题考官才可以忍受。。。要是一句话都你这样，考官直接认定你堆砌字数

the students who take part in many recreational activities may effect their stud 参加啊娱乐活动的学生会影响他们的学习？？？应该是学生参加（过多的）活动会影响学习吧。。。

many people can't limit the times in play and it will rece the times of rest. 前半句太中国英语了，后面times 。。。怎么有s???

十五分的满分这个估计就只有六七分。。。小错误太多了

推荐你背一下星火英语的四级作文50篇吧。。。关键是背整体的行文结构，模板看一下即可

❺ 请英语高手帮我点评一下我的四级作文（语法、用词)

" Mute English"among Chinese students
A phenomonon of "Mute English"appears among Chinese students because they can't TALK IN English to with their classmates ,friends and foreigners.
There are two reasons for this situation.First ,most of Chinese students STUDY English for their examinationS ,they pay more attention to written testS and neglect of spoken language .It is a failURE to ChinA'S ecation .SecondLY ,many Chinese students are so shy and unconfident in English class THAT they always LISTEN carefully ,but not put up their hands to answer teacher's questions .
If the Chinese students solve this problem ,as I see it ,they must cover the following points:first ,don't study hard for examiationS,but FOR the konwledge; secondLY,they should pay attention to spoken lanuage ; AT last,if they meet the foreigner in A supermarket or A restaurant ,they should talk with the foreign people boldly.
In a word,learning English or another foreign lanuage is AN interesting THING ,not a burden.WE shouldn't study only for examinationS.

❻ 英语四级出彩的作文句子

21. A and B share certain characteristics of form while differ in their ways of looking at the inner reality and developing a plot.

虽然A和B在形式上有某些共同之处，但是在审视内心世界和展开情节方面却各不相同。

妙笔赏析：两种事物的异同点对比，通过while（然而）连接，形成结构对比；然后通过share和differ一对反义词的运用形成语义对比。

22. Most, if not all, essays are made up of the beginning, the body and the end.

即使不是所有的，至少大多数文章是由开头、正文和结尾组成。

妙笔赏析：if not all经常跟在most, some, part等词后作插入语，起到减缓行文节奏和丰富表达方式的作用。

23. The beginning rouses the reader's interest in and secures his attention to the subject matter of the essay.

这个开头引起了读者对文章主题的兴趣，并保证了读者关注这一主题。

妙笔赏析：本句两短语rouses the reader's interest in和secures his attention to共用一宾语the subject matter of the essay，难度远远大于两个动词共享一宾语，运用巧妙，行文简洁。

24. Proportion is as important to an essay as it is to a painting.

比例之于文章如同它之于绘画一样重要。

妙笔赏析：本句结构为 Sth is as + adj. to A as it is to B (某物之于A如同它之于B一样......); 本结构类似于 A is to B what / as C is to D (A之于B如同C之于D); 前后结构对称，如同一句古诗。此结构的恰当运用有助于增添文采。

25. Foreign trade is beneficial to and indispensable for all nations.

对外贸易不仅有利于各个国家，而且是必不可少的。

妙笔赏析：本句两短语is beneficial to和is indispensable for共用一宾语all nations;运用巧妙，行文简洁。

26. They present their ideas in an impressive and convincing manner.

他们用给人以深刻印象和令人信服的方式展示自己的观点。

妙笔赏析：作者用present、impressive和convincing等正式词汇表现出主语“they”真诚态度。

27. Under one of the trees stood her parents who, while keeping an eye on her, were examining the milk-white blossoms with great interest and admiration.

她的父母站在一棵树下，一边照看着她，一边饶有兴致和满怀赞赏地察看那些乳白色的花朵儿。

妙笔赏析：本句为完全倒装句。主语为her parents,谓语为stood。因为主语后有一who引导的定语从句（一直到句尾），为了避免头重脚轻，固使用倒装句，同时也起到强调地点状语under one of the trees的作用。

28. Repetitions, for instance, lay emphasis on an idea.

比如说，重复强调了一种观点。

妙笔赏析：lay emphasis / stress on“强调”，经典短语，值得学习模仿。

29. Instead of beginning a sentence with a noun or a pronoun as subject, one may well start out with an adverb or an adverb clause.

一个句子可以一个副词或副词性从句开头，而不是以一个名词或代词作主语。

妙笔赏析：本句以一个副词短语开头，“不走寻常路”；其次，本句用两个同义词短语beginn... with和start out with表达相同语义，避免了用词重复，单调。

30. He had no strength to walk, let alone run.

他没有力气走路，更不用说跑了。

妙笔赏析：let alone“更不用说”，“遑论”；近义表达法：to say nothing of, not to mention

❼ 请英语高手帮我点评我的英语四级作文（语法，用词）非常感谢

1, 第二句中：are opened for free.
2,it has a purpose ? 此处最好用，There's a purpose 或者直接用状语从句：nowdays more and more museums are opened for free to attract the people ,especially the students to visit them ,which show the culture relics and the society's develop.
3."It is a beneficial activity."已经下结论？应该是 many people think .....
4 ,free admission have ? 单复数
5，第三段第一句为废话
6，it will lead to the order in mess,中应为 lead the order in mass
7,the public environment is also a serious problem that a part of visitors always throw away the plastic bottles and papers everywhere能看出我哪里改动来了吗？
8 So many workers who work in the museums think that the museums shouldn't opened freely. 中 who work in 去掉，将后面的shoudn't 中的not 提前为，don't think that 后面为肯定句。
9 I think the museum should open freely ,but it can limit the quantity of people every day. BUT 改为AND can -MAY .
10 最后一句中，who 应该去掉，visiting 已经是后置定语。后面的museums去掉。
如果总分25分的话，可以得12分左右。 主题不清晰，是一大问题。

❽ 写一篇关于评论英语四级的英语作文

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❾ 请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文。（语法和用词）万分感谢

不要老用nowadays 感觉很傻。并且不要写这么又长又不通顺的话 一句话包含了两个意思 就拆成两句话写。

可以这样写。
Currently, more and more college students chooses to travel on their own rather than travel packed by traveling agency.This is because they want time to relax.

第二段以一句话 改成被动语句。
Freedom would be released if the self-traveling has been chosen.

第二句话
The travelers can manage the touring time arbitrarily without any consideration on time limit.

不要写at last， 就Thus, more time will be given for people to take photos and enjoy the scenery.(这句话接在第二句后面 都是讲的时间 并且这个是没有时间限制的一个结果。真是 逻辑真混乱)

然后再Moreover, travelers can buy stuffs without the orientation imposed by the travelling agency.This will maximize the benefit of the travellers.不要老是they.... 而且这句话一点都不通顺

As to me可以删了. 一看就是很不专业的用法。 什么As known to all啊 这些词语 在写作尽量不要用 看着很低级。

直接 However， I prefer... 不要it, this都要好点。。 pleasure改成happiness

差不多这些。 写作还是要注意一个逻辑。 当然语言是慢慢训练过来的 大学了 写作要摆脱中学老师教的那种思维 还有那些弱智般的词汇。