提建议英语雅思作文
❶ 高手帮忙改改英语作文（要考雅思了），给些意见最好，thanks...
没法给你很具体的意见(例如语法等等).请谨慎接受.
首先.从整体上看,你的作文字数必定不够.雅思作文要求第二篇大作文为250字以上.字数不够的话自然是没希望到6分了.这个你有时间可以数数.你这篇作文大概有个220字左右.
其次,写agree和disagree的作文,必须在第一段提出自己的观点.这是必须的.切记.
再次,看样子你写的是折中,但是折中写法并不代表全文没有重点.主体段二三段必须有一段是让步段,另一段是你所支持的一个主体段,主体段字数应该比让步段要多,论点要更详细,而不是两段一样长.
第四,连词方面要加强.像如果用on the other hand,前面那段最好还是用on the one hand作为开头.另外一些细节部分,例如你第三段第三行出现了用and开头的句子,这是错误的.如果你想进一步说明或者解释上一句话,请用more specifically,如果是两句比较,用by contrast,如果是一句内的比较,用while.
第五,单词拼写和语法.比较琐碎的东西.建议你写完之后复制到word文档上面,有自动拼写检查.
大概就是这些问题了.你的支持论点不必深刻,只需合理.
最后祝你雅思考试好运.
❷ 雅思写作5.5很难吗有什么好的建议吗
针对雅思写作，人们先讨论一下它的雅思写作评分标准：
雅思写作要完成的要求（25%）
连贯性与衔接程度（25%）
词汇（25%）
英语的语法范畴和精确度（25%）
知道雅思写作评分标准以后，考生们就尽力把一下四个方面备考好：
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❸ 恳请各位英语达人们，老师们看一下我的雅思作文，给点意见（能得多少分）吧，非常感谢！
写的不错，简洁明了，标志词也很清楚，复杂句型用的比较多，如果考场上单词回拼写正确，大答概是7.5的样子，建议再多用几个难词提升文章品位。
This essay is going to discuss both views and give my personal opinions.
改成 in this essay ，i will try to discuss both sides of this phenomenon and will endeavor to exemplify my opinions on this complex debate 。
❹ 求一篇英语雅思作文
一、雅思大作文开头：
开头要短小;要有立场和观点;避免模板。
如： the amount of advertising on TV be increased or decreased?
Nowadays many people discuss whether we need …or not.
Now whether…. has become a very hot debate in society.
As far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions. Some people think that ……Others believe that …... I think both views have their reasons.
Recently the ... has been brought into focus ... Nowhere in history has the issue been more visible. In this essay, I aim to explore this complicated phenomenon from diverse perspectives, identify the relevant contributing factors and bring up some effective measures.
二、雅思大作文结构：
一个paragraph一个idea;避免过多examples, esp personal examples.;段落间的平衡
三、雅思大作文语言：
避免idioms, famous sayings
避免poetic language
Explain your point…then explain it again in a different way
Use “a mix of longer and short sentences”
以上从开头、结构、语言等三个方面对雅思大作文的写作技巧进行了简单的总结，建议考生们可以根据以上建议，并通过针对性的练习来逐步掌握雅思大作文的写作技巧，从而在雅思作文考试中取得更好的成绩。
❺ 英语雅思大作文求提纲
雅思大作文的提纲可以去新通外语上看看询问一下，还有范文可以作参考。
❻ 英语作文:用不同句型写出班级违规现象并提出建议（5条）
自己改动一下就行了 ·小学英语作文 ·初中英语作文 ·高中英语作文 ·大回学英语作文答 ·考研英语作文 ·中考英语作 文·高考英语作文 ·英语四级作文 ·英语写作资料 ·GRE作文 ·留学文书写作 ·雅思考试作文 ·英语六级作文。 ···· http://www.rrting.com/English/yyxw/ 这里有近千篇英语作文，希望能帮到你，好就要给分喔,未来几年写作文都不用怕了
❼ 求一篇雅思的英语作文
Should ecation and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?
The improvement of the life level e to the economic development has led people to focus more on their spiritual life, with their ecation and healthcare inclusive, but who has to be responsible for the cost of ecation and healthcare has been raised onto heated discussion.
Health care and ecation, two of the basic elements in social life, are always in the concern of the public. Some people suggest that the service in these two fields should be paid by the government and be free to the public; while others believe it to be the ty of the people to pay on themselves. As to me, the coverage on ecation and healthcare should be made the ty of the government while leaving some special demands to be burdened by indivials.
Government free provision of ecation and healthcare can demonstrate their responsibility in serving the people. Having fulfilled their obligations to the country in the form of taxes, citizens have the right to enjoy the service in return from the government, with ecation and health care being the two basic ones. Also, as the ty carrier in promoting social development, by guaranteeing the right of ecation and health care, the government are enabled to encourage citizens to make more contributions to the society.
Government’s investment on these two fields is beneficial to ensure social equality. Being free of charge, every citizen can take advantage of these social services, without the worries about being treated unfairly e to their lack of social resources, such as their social status and human network. Besides, this will be helpful to rece the difference between the rich and the poor, at least in these two basic rights, creating a more harmonious social atmosphere.
Admittedly, if the citizens are wealthy enough, or when they demand some special service, or when the government is too limited in its budget, indivials’ sharing some of the cost may also seem to be reasonable. However, rare cases of particular requirements do not represent the general pursuits of the public, and limitation in budget does not free the government of its accountability.
To sum up, government should provide free ecation and healthcare to the public and pay the cost. Only when people are better ecated and healthier in physiques, can the society be more harmonious in atmosphere and dynamic in development.
这是我在雅思救星上看到的一篇雅思作文范文，相信对你有用，你也可以去看看其它的范文。
❽ 求雅思考试建议
1.同学,我以我雅来思7.5的经验建议源你一定要扩充词汇量! 虽然你高考135,但这跟雅思完全是两码事,雅思阅读词汇不够连文章也看不懂的.还有两三个月,突击应该还是来得及的,可以去买一本词汇的书每天记一记.
2. 建可以去新东方或者朗阁之类的比较可靠的培训机构报一两个突击班或者专攻的班(比如雅思阅读班), 这样占用的时间少一些. 而且这些培训机构比较强调应试技巧，可以帮助你更好地答题，对于分数的短时间提高很有帮助．
3．另外一定要做真题的,熟悉雅思考试的题型很重要,尤其像你没接触过,更要先了解这个考试体系.楼上说的剑桥真题系列4567就很好．
4. 雅思作文还是有一定套路的,你一直以来作文分高说明你英语基础应该还不错,关键是像我上面讲到的,一定要去先了解雅思考试,比如它的作文是分大小作文(共两篇),以及各自的时间安排\写作要点...通通都要了解. 推荐慎小嶷的<<十天突破雅思写作>>,真的很管用!
总之只要努力,以你的基础,7都完全可能的! 加油哦～
❾ 帮忙写个雅思英语作文提纲
1.开头。space travel 的确给人类抄带来了很多好处。然而有些人觉得这种研究对我们的日常生活没啥影响。对于我而言，我倾向于同意这种观点。
2.的确是big step,因为有很多bonus——1.了解月球环境，探索未来居住可能 2.探索其他能源
3.However，space travel to the moon的许多发现还处于研究阶段——1.要有practical uses还需要很长的时间和很多的钱。2.现在的daily life其实有很多更现实的问题比如高犯罪率和低就业率，在这些方面，这种太空探索其实没什么用处。
4.的确space travel to the moon对整个人类文明史有很大作用，但是对daily life作用不大。政府需要做些太空探索以造福子孙后代，但也需要出台一些政策解决现有问题。
❿ 求英语作文，关于考试焦虑症的。提出意见
自己改动一下就行复了 ·小学英语作文制 ·初中英语作文 ·高中英语作文 ·大学英语作文 ·考研英语作文 ·中考英语作 文·高考英语作文 ·英语四级作文 ·英语写作资料 虑症的。提出·GRE作文 ·留学文书写作 ·雅思考试作文 ·英语六级作文。 http://www.rrting.com/English/yyxw/ 这里有近千篇英语作文，希望能帮到你，好就要给分喔,未来几年写作文都不用怕了
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