英语雅思批判作文

⑴ 各位英语大神，我是雅思考生，写作不强，能不能帮忙批改这篇作文，再问一下，这作文能不能5或5.5分啊

你写一边倒，写点利再写弊，整个逻辑更完整。题目是食品生产机械化，添回加剂什么的虽然给答生产效率产量什么带来明显增长，但是过度使用会危害人身体健康，也有可能导致劳动力过剩。感觉你写劳动力过剩的比重有点大，所以你前面可以先写点这个带来的好处。5.5可以。

⑵ 雅思英文作文（只需150字左右）。要求精辟，有深度。

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Who should be most responsible for children's ecation? Give your opinion and reasons for it. You should write at least 250 words.
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Sample Answer
It seems to me that there is a clear-cut answer to this question. Although in the early years of a child's life parents are the principal ecators, that role is soon assumed very largely by the child's teachers. Even elder brothers and sisters, who may give good advice, can never take the place of teachers in molding a child's mind.
First and foremost, teachers know best in terms of ecation. They are professional ecators, and as such they are better equipped with expertise in teaching. It is in schools, too, that children make friends and learn how to act in a socially responsible manner. Teachers know best how to organize, motivate and discipline their students. Furthermore, as children spend most of their time in schools, teachers have more influence on them than their parents do.
Parents, on the other hand, are mostly either too busy to spend time with their children, or are ignorant of the right way to ecate them. This is not to say that parents can shirk (refuse to take) their responsibility for ecating their children. Parenting is an important factor that shapes competency and character formation in children. Failure to take such responsibility constitutes delinquency as parents.
Nevertheless, given the professional qualifications of teachers and the time they spend with their students, it is clear that the overwhelming burden of ecating children falls upon the shoulders of teachers.

⑶ 英语作文:大学生是否应该评论老师，批评老师

自己改动一下就行了
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http://www.rrting.com/English/yyxw/这里有近千篇英语作文，以后作文都不怕了。希望能帮到你，要给分喔

⑷ 求一篇雅思的英语作文

Should ecation and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

The improvement of the life level e to the economic development has led people to focus more on their spiritual life, with their ecation and healthcare inclusive, but who has to be responsible for the cost of ecation and healthcare has been raised onto heated discussion.

Health care and ecation, two of the basic elements in social life, are always in the concern of the public. Some people suggest that the service in these two fields should be paid by the government and be free to the public; while others believe it to be the ty of the people to pay on themselves. As to me, the coverage on ecation and healthcare should be made the ty of the government while leaving some special demands to be burdened by indivials.

Government free provision of ecation and healthcare can demonstrate their responsibility in serving the people. Having fulfilled their obligations to the country in the form of taxes, citizens have the right to enjoy the service in return from the government, with ecation and health care being the two basic ones. Also, as the ty carrier in promoting social development, by guaranteeing the right of ecation and health care, the government are enabled to encourage citizens to make more contributions to the society.

Government’s investment on these two fields is beneficial to ensure social equality. Being free of charge, every citizen can take advantage of these social services, without the worries about being treated unfairly e to their lack of social resources, such as their social status and human network. Besides, this will be helpful to rece the difference between the rich and the poor, at least in these two basic rights, creating a more harmonious social atmosphere.

Admittedly, if the citizens are wealthy enough, or when they demand some special service, or when the government is too limited in its budget, indivials’ sharing some of the cost may also seem to be reasonable. However, rare cases of particular requirements do not represent the general pursuits of the public, and limitation in budget does not free the government of its accountability.

To sum up, government should provide free ecation and healthcare to the public and pay the cost. Only when people are better ecated and healthier in physiques, can the society be more harmonious in atmosphere and dynamic in development.

这是我在雅思救星上看到的一篇雅思作文范文，相信对你有用，你也可以去看看其它的范文。

⑸ 求大家来批判一片雅思大作文

看第一段感觉有6-7分，第一句时态改成完成时比较好，many people have realized...
第二段就云里雾里了，错误不少
比如“ they can learn faster and better easily than” 语意重复了
”We can found“ can后接原型find
classmate换成student
“ the talent will be more self-confident and self-esteem”不是talent自己自信，是让人自信。
第三段，There is an old saying，雅思作文中不要用谚语名言之类的句子。
Some “disable people”—— 用disabled
“Talents are not everything as some factors play significant role” 估计你想说not as essential as...
你这句话有两个动词== 至少要用playing吧 ，roles，
好吧，as表原因时前面加个逗号
become a normal one，还有normal是正常，不畸形没毛病的意思，这里ordinary比较好。
结尾 even though和but不能同时用，加个逗号；fortune不可数；”put into consideration“用这不合适

这篇文儿差不多有5分，很多地方表达不够准确，更别说地道了；你知道的句型很多，但是用的不灵活，几乎每一句都能挑点儿错出来；指代有的地方不明确；词汇深度还可以。

重点补补语法吧，简单句写准确了再练复杂句；
每写一篇essay，先自己检查，再找专业老师修改；
还有多看看考官的范文（剑桥雅思书后灰底儿的model answer）
祝好运

⑹ 求雅思作文批改，有什么缺陷，大概多少分，谢谢

4.5分以下。
模版痕迹严重，无意义的模版套句太多。
字数不足，217字。
不分段，逻辑混乱。

语法非常薄弱，几乎每个句子都有语法错误，有几个句子不成句，例如最后一句，还有些整句看不懂什么意思，中式思维的英语。

简单改一些最基础的mistakes：
encantion --- ？？ecation？

A intensive-- an

be highest ----最高级前面必须加the，而且这句话太中式英文了，一般理解为身高最高。改为be the most excellent.

make themselves more competitiveness --- competitive

phenomenons--- 此单词复数为phenomena

there are some people argue that --- there are去掉，或者argue改成arguing

dis advantages--- 是一个词，不要分开写，disadvantages

总的来说，主要是语法的问题，需要从语法方面入手，从基础开始，先写简单句，确保每一句都没有语法错误，分数会大大提高。注意主谓宾，可数名词和不可数名词，单复数问题，还有前后搭配，单词拼写，词性错误，时态一致。

⑺ 求一篇英语雅思作文

一、雅思大作文开头：
开头要短小;要有立场和观点;避免模板。
如： the amount of advertising on TV be increased or decreased?
Nowadays many people discuss whether we need …or not.
Now whether…. has become a very hot debate in society.
As far as this topic is concerned, different people have different opinions. Some people think that ……Others believe that …... I think both views have their reasons.
Recently the ... has been brought into focus ... Nowhere in history has the issue been more visible. In this essay, I aim to explore this complicated phenomenon from diverse perspectives, identify the relevant contributing factors and bring up some effective measures.
二、雅思大作文结构：
一个paragraph一个idea;避免过多examples, esp personal examples.;段落间的平衡
三、雅思大作文语言：
避免idioms, famous sayings
避免poetic language
Explain your point…then explain it again in a different way
Use “a mix of longer and short sentences”
以上从开头、结构、语言等三个方面对雅思大作文的写作技巧进行了简单的总结，建议考生们可以根据以上建议，并通过针对性的练习来逐步掌握雅思大作文的写作技巧，从而在雅思作文考试中取得更好的成绩。

⑻ 求一篇英语雅思大作文。关于学生学习国际新闻同意或不同意的作文。分四段。200词以上

Children in secondary school study international news as a subject, but some think that’s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today watching news, a means of learning what is happening around the world, has become a way of life to many people. When the value of news is undisputed, an issue of debate is whether it is necessary to include international news as part of school curriculum. I am of the opinion that it will be an enheartening/exciting change.

⑼ 一个英语作文雅思的求一篇范文

可以从个人发展和社会发展角度去探讨。
个人有权利追求更好的工作环境和待遇，以及在此专过程中自己水平的更属大提升；
这些有技术的高层次人才在发达国家工作，有利于更好的发挥自己的特长，从而带动全社会乃至全人类的发展和进步。
雅思还是要自己多写多练啦~~

⑽ 雅思小作文，请高人评分啊，本人英文不好，若有语法错误请指出

其实，你应该插入图片。这样方便大家看。
我的修改如下：
This graph shows the distribution of consumer expenditure by categories in five different countries, including Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in the year of 2002. 首句点明主题
Three categories of expenditure are addressed in this graph: Food, drinks and tobacco serve as the first category, Clothing and footwear as the second category, and Leisure and ecation as the last. 点明三个分类。

下面论述时，先总起句表明观点，然后再列数据；如，总的来说，第一类消费大大超过其他两项消费。In general, the expenditure on the first category surpasses the other two. People in... spent...

然后再提一个观点，如，休闲教育还没有时装消费多。然后再列数据。

这样子写的话，条理就很清楚了。雅思打分是结构、语句、用词都要看的。结构清楚了，就算语言用词不是很精准，分数也会高点。

目前的样子，结构不明确、论点不清晰、用词不够准确。但是句子比较长（即非大量短句) 可理解，现在能够得5分到5.5分。如果结构清楚了，虽然语句不是很准确，也能拔到6分的样子。