雅思英语作文批改
㈠ 求助~~雅思作文批改
Hardly can the public reach a consensus on the question whether authorities should be economically responsible for the prevention of diseases or the treatment of patients in current society. I would like to compare these two opinions from the following aspects. (第一段你是套模板的，我就不改了，不过以后还是记得要自己写，因为太容易看出来了）
Recently, huge amount of money has been invested in public health and medical research departments to ensure the delivery of advanced treating techniques and the availability of free medical services. Evidently, this measure has been approved by a large number of people in that they regard it as a kind of resident allowance donated by the governments and a bridge connecting them with authorities. Furthermore, with the prevalence of free medical services and the application of latest medical technologies, an increasing number of citizens are safe from the serious consequences or side effects triggered by some harmful dieases.
However, many clinical experts, sociologists and economists advise the government should concentrate more on the precaution of diseases and strengthening public health. For instance, stopping environment from being contaminated is a good way to rece the insidence of certain diseases. Moreover, the governments should advocate healthy diet and lifestyles , which are much better than the delivery of post-disease medicares
In conclusion, the government should focus more on disease prevension becuase it not only keeps people healthy, but also releases the pressure of medical institutions.
帮你重写了后面几段，提几点意见吧
1 注意选词和搭配的得体。你最好多看一些通俗的英文材料，学习一下人家的表达。
2 注意语言的简洁，
3 不要套模板。
㈡ 求批改英语作文(IELTS)
Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women.
Do you agree or disagree?
Should men and women be equal? This is a much talked about question nowadays. In fact, sex is always a barrier for a woman to achieve their success in her career. I firmly believe that women should be given the same right as men, because they are equally important in all human activities.
First of all, with the rapidly development of society and economy, there have emerged many working opportunities and women are certainly as intelligent as men if they have a same ecation. Therefore, some high-level jobs are more occupied by women than the past. As this result, it proved that women have the same abilities as men. Personally, it is a mistake to base our views on broad generalizations about the abilities of men and women and it should be according to indivial abilities and not focus on the gender.
Secondly, the characteristics of men and women as such stereotypes are often inaccurate. Not all women are bad at business, just as not all men are poor interpersonal communicators. For example, if men are often calm and thoughtfully, but some men are more careless and hesitant than women? Beside, if women are always sensitive, then what would you say when they are insensitive in work or interpersonal. Obviously, there are no absolute advantages when considering their gender.
In conclusion, as a man, I would hopefully see that more outstanding women can be working their favourite jobs and can get their desirable position. Because a person’ indivial ability is far more important than their gender.
㈢ 自己备考雅思考试，作文没有人批改，每天练习有效果吗
以下内容希望能帮到你
1、多背、多记、多练习
学习语言没有捷径，从单词到句子，都得花十足的功夫。在背和记的过程中，语感会自然而然地增强，其潜移默化的效果在短期内效果并不明显，但坚持两三个月就会感到英语也不是那么爱和自己过不去。多背多记之后，还是得多写作多练习。雅思写作技巧把自己在课堂上的东西先掌握，然后尽量在练习的文章中使用出来，这样才是真正的属于自己的东西。
2、培养兴趣
雅思考试写作技巧“兴趣是最好的老师”，似乎是放之四海而皆准的真理，也是很多同学初次接触英语听到的一句话。带着兴趣去学习，效率高并且不会感觉被动。
3、巧妙分配时间，合理规划
雅思写作一共就1个小时，大小分别40分钟和20分钟。这个是自行调整的。在备考时，先前把多数精力放在大作文上面，而考前的两个星期则侧重小作文练习，因为短期内小作文拿分比大作文拿分相对容易。注意：准备雅思考试系统规划是很重要的。
4、避免过度依赖模板
一般，模板套句用得太多太滥，考官见多了也会厌烦，考生拿到高分的可能性也就不是很大。并且，模板很容易限制思维，我们自己想到的很多观点都被束缚了。我们不应该依赖模板，而是把培养和握好技巧。
5、重视作文批改
即便每天写作而不做任何回顾分析，也未必见得有进步。其实，之后的老师批改极其重要，着重分析这些错误，可以有效的避免重蹈覆辙。雅思写作技巧在上课和备考过程中写很多作文，刚开始错误百出，但很明显，随着时间的推移，常犯错误在逐渐减少，这和老师的批改和纠错有着密不可分的关系。
㈣ 雅思作文批改
看起来是典型的辩论型题目。写得还是不错的，不过也许就像你说的那样，毕竟是第一次写这种文章，所以技巧性可能还有点欠缺。如果条理再清晰一些的话，就更好了。
个人认为，辩论型题目，以这个题目为例吧，考官最想看到的就是你自己的意见，尽量不要出现模棱两可的观点，尤其不要说“It's all depends”之类的话...洋人很反感这个的，尽可能使你的观点明确。这究竟是积极还是消极的发展，一定要有一个明确的立场，即一边倒。在文章的第一段，先写两句作为背景，实在写不好的话，就改写题目，确保不会跑题。然后亮明自己的观点，最后可以过渡一下，为第二段做准备。一般情况下第一段不要太长，三四句即可。
第二段就是重点了。这也就是你需要重点下功夫的地方。我在前面说了，这部分可能条理不是很清晰。我读了下你的第二段，其实你有表述自己的理由，但是看起来是不是很没有头绪呢？这里就需要用一些词来连接，比如“First of all”，“next”，“last but not the least”这类的词，可以让人很明确地看到你的每一条理由。实际上，每条理由后面加上一两句，来扩展你的理由，也就是支撑观点。尽量，不要举例子，一两句是说不清的，如果举也尽量不要举具体例子。我记得有一个题是关于战争的，我看到的一篇范文的观点是战争摧残人们家园，但是这个考生的高明之处就在于他没有明确地说就是美国攻打伊拉克。这一点一定要注意，英联邦的国家很反感别人说他们不好的。
第三段，也就是结尾段了。对于辩论型题目，三段足够了，但是解释性题目，即要求提出解决方案的，则需要写四段。所以可以考虑把你的二三段重新整合一下。结尾段需要再次亮明观点，这一点你做得很好呢，第一次写就可以做到这个很不容易的，好多学生最后都草草总结了事了。但是一定要和开头照应，实际上简单的做法就是再次改写题目，或者改写开头段。
最后再说一下，你很有心呢，格式做得非常好。但是第一段出现了缩写，这个在正规的雅思考试里是绝对不允许的，改正就可以了。
我是今年4月，在北京，参加的雅思考试，我的写作拿了6.5分，我的雅思写作老师和我一起参加了考试，他拿了7分，所以还是个OK的成绩。同学加油吧，也祝你早日通过雅思考试，拿到理想的分数。
㈤ 求雅思作文批改
As the price of residential properties, continues to grow, especially in some developed countires, instead of buying houses, renting appartments has been regarded as an ideal way for more people. And the advantages and disadvantages of this way will be discused as follow.
The pricing advance is undoubtly the most evident for rental properties. Comparing with purchasing houses, especially in metropolises, which costs millions of dollars, the expense of rental properties is significantly lower and more affordable for ordinary families. Besides, renting properties tends to be more flexible as relocation is relatively eassier for the tenants. And e to the flexibility, it sometimes further reces living expense by cutting the related cost, such as transportation, significantly and considerably saving the time which is precious for people living in modern societies.
Nevertheless, the disadvantages of it cannot be ignored. In terms of investment, it is the appreciation of real estates that provides people chances to double or triple their wealth. Therefore, those who are still renting apartments may miss these opprotunities to generate enmorous wealth. Besides, the ownership of residential properties does give people the feeling of psychological satisfaction and filfulment as this kind of ownership, in some countries, means the strong capability in wealth generation, higher social reputation and more degree of freedom. Thus, for indivials who are still renting houses, they are unfortunately unable to experience this sense of satisfaction and sometimes may feel upset or annoyed by some properties related problems such as increased rental expense and fine on delaied rental payments.
In conculsion, the advantages of renting houses includes lower expenses and relative flexibility while the drawbacks include missing the chances of generating more wealth and occurrence of some rental related problems
我重写了这篇文章，希望对你有帮助。提几点吧，1开头段，简洁一些；2 题目问的是优点和缺点，并没有叫你说你的看法，也没有叫讨论不同人的观点啊。建议你看一些国外报纸或者杂志的文章，相信对你的写作会有帮助
㈥ 雅思作文批改的老师哪里可以找
我试过环球青藤雅思的写作批改，是专门的雅思写作老师来改，可以帮忙回查看写作情况答，这样你就可以了解自己在语言表达方面的薄弱处并加以改正。?
另外如果你在学校里有熟识的英语老师，也可以请求他/她的帮忙，吃吃饭聊聊天也是不错的指导方式。
㈦ 有能批改英语作文的app吗雅思
同学你好！
你可以登录朗阁写作一对一批改页面进行作文提交批改，名师点评专会通过邮箱反馈给你哦。属
地址http://www.longre.com/topic_2013/zt/ysnh_1015/zuowen.aspx
㈧ 雅思大作文求批改，求较细修改意见（思路上面也望指点），最好有大概分数预估。。
As a result, certain indivials hold a view that writing letters are fading away even disappearing thoroughly.
建议改词：hold a view- proclaim claim assert advocate
Personally, I think their view is overly simplistic.
雅思大作文还是写作规范点好，think要换掉，还要加that
第一段末尾说了自己的观点，和第二段开头有点罗嗦。
Also, some persons just love writing,
persons-people
Many people believe that it is better for some feelings conveyed by characters rather than oral way
way加s
some claim letters will disappear thoroughly.
加that, thoroughly 用得太多，可以换成drastically dramatically compeletly
Besides that, even just feelings, such as a kind of hobby, can also keeping indivials writing letters without stop
can also keep without stopping
even e-mails，a common way to communication,
a commom way(access methodology) to communicate
maybe the number of people love writing letters are less than what it used to be
the number of people loving或者people who
总的来说，词汇量还是不错的，但是句子上可以较大加强，定语从句使用较多，可以尝试平行结构，省略结构，插入语等，同时，句子缺少长句，长短句结合不是很好，通常雅思写作在提出自己一个观点之后，应当用1-2长短句进行扩展，而不是直接写下一个观点。
另外，如果对写作较为熟练，在时间 字数充足的时候， 开头请不要使用模版句式或类模版句式， 建议直接写At present, whether the auto-mobiles will dominate the leadership of the writing letters has became a controversial issue.
我也是雅思新手，不足之处请多指出~谢谢~
㈨ 雅思作文修改～
同学 我不晓得现在的雅思和我高中时候的雅思有没有什么变化
但是喃你这篇文章不容易得高分哦 从第一段就看得出来了
雅思的大作文都是这种 给你个话题喊你说你同意还是不同意
注意！是do you agree or disagree哈 所以最好的做法就是
在第一段明确的说出你是agree还是disagree
然后再在后面的段落说to what extent
每段只能包括一个主题 并且开头都要用一个topic sentence
来说明你这段主要说的是啥子
最后总结一下，注意！总结这部分一定要再次强调agree还是disagree哈
我上了雅思 但是最后没去考 不过给我们上雅思的外教给我的作文分数一直都是7分
还有我给你说的这些是英语作文的通用格式
不管你是考雅思托福还是公共英语专业英语 作文都要按这样写才得的倒高分
下面就看下你的细节问题哈：
maney？打错了 money吧
companies and the government can both reach this standard,while the scientific research is not easy to be concted.
这句话不咋个好 我感觉有歧义
caring nothing about the development of the country前面加个but
For instance,a beverage company will never try utmost to research nuclear,vice versa这例子举得不好 没有说服力 如果实在举不出来最好不要举 不然还会扣分
还有很严重的一点，应该是on one hand，on the other hand哈 这种太明显了 会扣很多分的
The paper manufacturers are good example。 example是可数的 加s 主谓宾要一致了嘛
Every day the waste from the factories is mped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.这句话有语法错误哦 你要把前面的句改成从句或者分词结构That every day the waste from the factories is mped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.或者Every day the waste from the factories mped into nearby rivers is one of the root causes of environmental pollution.
Due to the waste coming from private companies,companies should be responsible for cleaning the polluted rivers. e to 不能这家用哦 虽然它是表原因 但是你这个句子用它不好As the waste coming from private companies,they should be responsible for cleaning the polluted rivers.
重复出现的东西最好用代词 特别是在同一个句子头 这样才符合英语的习惯
以上仅供参考哈 分我就不打了 加油O(∩_∩)O~
我前面不是就已经给你说了吗？按照那种通用格式写
然后注意不要有语法错误就行了
其实要求并不高的
㈩ 雅思写作考官批改作文的时间是多久
雅思大作文背黄金模板真的有用吗?大作文分数为何提不高?雅思写作考官是如何批改雅思大作文的呢?下面两篇文章中就用实例为大家讲解雅思考官是如何批改雅思作文的.希望对大家备考2012年雅思写作考试有所帮助! 搜学留学发现,许多学生非常的重视各种“黄金模板”,可是许多同学背了很多的模板,最终的写作分数却仍然不理想.在下面的两篇文章中就用实例为大家讲解雅思考官是如何批改雅思作文的,同学们快来看看这些作文中的小错误背后都隐藏了什么玄机吧. 雅思作文这样批,系列一 很多时候学生会从某某老师那里获取种种所谓的“黄金模板”,又或者是高举考前必备一本,视若雅思界的圣经.而不去管什么“碰文”.而最最难过的却是分数不给力,才知天道难酬勤!换个方式学吧,看看隔壁的“他”的作文中那些错误的背后是否隐藏了写作的某些玄机. 请看下面这个小作文的开头段,看似行文流水,实则欲哭无泪. As can be seen from the table chart, it gives us the percentage of national consumer experience by category in 2002 in five different countries.谈及套句,小作文中“As can be seen from…”曾被列为小作文必备佳句,而孰不知此句虽好,但native speaker 常把它放在主体段落开头句.若论行文习惯,实在勉强.再者,“table chart”必会让考官在批卷的疲劳中会心一笑.但是烤鸭们,不知啊,你让他笑,他却让你人比黄花瘦,尽管他是那样的爱你.此短语翻译成中文叫“表格图”,考生自是觉得挺有中国风的感觉.但考官会认为是“这table就是表格,也就是图的一种,还后面要是再加一chart,再来一图.实为black sheep 一族”啊!南部陈更要翻译成“表格图图”?实在是具有喜感啊!再论“us”一词,感觉倒是亲民派系, 考官考生一家人啊.但是,雅思写作,半学术文体,这词总有点较为随意.所以,宁为被动,隐去施动者,换成it can be seen ,或是it represents that 等句,或许会更好点.考生最无辜的地方就是下面的这个percentage.我们都知道,衣服表格不可能只有全图一个数据,又怎会遗忘名词单复数的问题呢?最后那个“in 2002 in five different countries”,感觉起来好似是信息满满,不知道是否也是信心满满?语法老师告诉我们：当句子中同时有地点状语和时间状语时,一般要把地点状语放在时间状语之前 .要知道,不走寻常路,那是考官的作风.考生要是也这样做,哭泣大于微笑. 基于上述段落的分析,不知道同学们是否也会有所收获?其实开头段,自是不必非得写的那叫一个倾国倾城.简单大方,信息全面,能够统领全文,那就最好.你,懂得了吗? 雅思作文这样批,系列二 People have, in rercent years, shown concern on the dire consequences of global warming and air pollution. Some people suggest that we should limit are travel（travelling） instead of car use. It seems to me that the objection against air travel is based on incorrect facts and stereotypes.（The）Vehicle is an integral segment of urban instrial civilization, mirroring contemporary life, in its best and unrest aspects. Just as machinery is integral to instrialization, air is central to world economy.（有逻辑关系吗?）Air travels make it possible for people to move around the world freely and quickly. Today, the tips can be completed in a matter of hours. One can attend a meeting in Pairs and dinner in New York the same day. There is a growing recognition that air travels have several advantages, while（连接词使用有误,改成mean