change雅思英语作文大全

A. 100分悬赏，求大家帮我看看两篇雅思英语作文，一篇修改前，一篇修改后

看了你的文章,我终于明白你为什么在分以下了.

分析一下你的优势和劣势:
你的优势:1, 能够清楚理解题目含义 ; 2, 有一定的逻辑性和良好的思维能力.
3,有一定单词量和英文基础.

你的不足: 1, 应该重点练习并熟悉英文的语句结构,和词汇用法.虽然你有一定的单词量,但是你对他们的用法还不够熟练. 例如:你首段的第一句,就是一个没有主语的重句.还有第二段第一句中的"reap",用在这里不太恰当,因为"reap"的获得是作为努力的成果而获得的,用在这里似乎词不达意.
2, 觉得你的写作方式很原创,一看就知道是你写的.呵呵.因为我个人觉得你的好多话都是你个人临场发挥的.我的建议是你平时能够多读一些文章,熟悉各种词汇和语句的用法,再把你认为经典的收藏为己用.这样久而久之,你的写作自然就有突破.
3, 论证段的语句不要太复杂,尽量简单清晰.如果太复会有很做作的感觉,反而会对论点起到反作用.我看了你的那篇被改过的文章,就好很多.看起来比较顺畅,可读性强,不蹩脚,得6分绰绰有余.你可以将其与你写的进行对比,然后用心去体会他们之间的差别和不同,逐渐改变你的写作习惯.

总之, 写作是练出来的,即使像楼上两位仁兄辛苦的替你改完,不知道对你写作的真正作用会有多大呢,至少我看不到它的效果,(声明:词话绝无冒犯他们的意思). 另外送你一句话,切忌繁冗复杂,崇尚简单明快.因为你想要的毕竟只是 6分而已 - 希望你能取得真经 :)

B. 修改英语作文！ielts

我考过两次雅思，作文第一次7.5，第二次7。你这个作文问题挺多的，语法就有不少毛病，软件翻译的？结构也不合理，还跑题，题目是是否应该按照传统模式建房子，你写的更多是古代建筑的好处和缺点。

先说结构吧。你赞成传统建筑模式的观点，就应该用大量篇幅写你为什么赞成。中间三段应该是前两段写传统建筑模式的优点，第三段写传统建筑模式的一些不足。

开头写得不好。我觉得还是应套用模板开头。
The issue whether we should build our buildings in traditional styles is a complex and controversial one. Some people believe that..., while other people assert that.... As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former/latter opinion. （两个省略号处分别写两种观点）

这段内容还行，但语法太差了。你说了埃及古金字塔的好处，最后还要拐到要求的话题上，说出按古建筑模式建房子对现代经济的影响，即括号中这句。
It is indisputable that the traditional architecture style and ancient buildings are a civilized symbol for the country .Take Egypt for example,the pyramid is a mystery and precious treasure, symbolizing the witness of ancient Egyptians. In addition ,traditional building structure is not only a symbol but also a platform , on which tourists and local people can communicate with each other. (So, if we build our buidings in traditional styles, more tourists will be attracted to our country, which will greatly increase foreign currency and improve local economy. )

接下来一段应继续写传统建筑模式的好处，但可以不用像上面一段那么多。可以写很多人喜欢传统建筑的风格，那些建筑看起来赏心悦目，建造更多传统建筑物能提高居民的满意度什么的。楼主自己写写这段吧，当然也可以写传统建筑其他方面的好处。

这一段该写缺点了。缺点不宜写太多，不然岂不是否定自己的观点了？
On the other hand ,however, some traditional buildings are not tall enough to accommodate many residents as modern skyscrapers are. some people believe that if residents live in morden tall buildings , they can breath fresh air as well as enjoy the comfortable atmosphere .Moreover, it is better to select steel rather than stone to build our buildings for the reason that steel materials can bear a heavier weight of floors and walls.

总算到结尾了。。。。
In conclusion, though traditionally-built architecture has some disadvantages, it plays a great role to reveal local culture and ancient civilization. And I believe that the advantage is well worth the shortage. So we should build our buildings in traditional styles.

楼主这篇作文啊。。。除了字数多，其他真是乱七八糟啊。。。当然我写的也不完美，大家批判着看。

C. 求一篇雅思的英语作文

Should ecation and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services?

The improvement of the life level e to the economic development has led people to focus more on their spiritual life, with their ecation and healthcare inclusive, but who has to be responsible for the cost of ecation and healthcare has been raised onto heated discussion.

Health care and ecation, two of the basic elements in social life, are always in the concern of the public. Some people suggest that the service in these two fields should be paid by the government and be free to the public; while others believe it to be the ty of the people to pay on themselves. As to me, the coverage on ecation and healthcare should be made the ty of the government while leaving some special demands to be burdened by indivials.

Government free provision of ecation and healthcare can demonstrate their responsibility in serving the people. Having fulfilled their obligations to the country in the form of taxes, citizens have the right to enjoy the service in return from the government, with ecation and health care being the two basic ones. Also, as the ty carrier in promoting social development, by guaranteeing the right of ecation and health care, the government are enabled to encourage citizens to make more contributions to the society.

Government’s investment on these two fields is beneficial to ensure social equality. Being free of charge, every citizen can take advantage of these social services, without the worries about being treated unfairly e to their lack of social resources, such as their social status and human network. Besides, this will be helpful to rece the difference between the rich and the poor, at least in these two basic rights, creating a more harmonious social atmosphere.

Admittedly, if the citizens are wealthy enough, or when they demand some special service, or when the government is too limited in its budget, indivials’ sharing some of the cost may also seem to be reasonable. However, rare cases of particular requirements do not represent the general pursuits of the public, and limitation in budget does not free the government of its accountability.

To sum up, government should provide free ecation and healthcare to the public and pay the cost. Only when people are better ecated and healthier in physiques, can the society be more harmonious in atmosphere and dynamic in development.

这是我在雅思救星上看到的一篇雅思作文范文，相信对你有用，你也可以去看看其它的范文。

D. 一个英语作文雅思的求一篇范文

可以从个人发展和社会发展角度去探讨。
个人有权利追求更好的工作环境和待遇，以及在此专过程中自己水平的更属大提升；
这些有技术的高层次人才在发达国家工作，有利于更好的发挥自己的特长，从而带动全社会乃至全人类的发展和进步。
雅思还是要自己多写多练啦~~

E. 雅思英语作文

建议抄首先可以参加袭北外雅思培训班，上完课后要整理笔记，总结开头-主体段落-结论的具体写法以及常用的语言结构。

考前50~60天，练习句子翻译考前40天，练习观点和词汇：挑选各个专题的话题若干，每天训练观点和词汇构思+段落写作；

考前30天：以熟练为主，完成写作训练。结合上课教授的写作方法和思路+每天构思得来的观点——不限时写作（每两天一篇）。

考前20天：挑选三种文体的代表作，请老师批改并面授点评，看看问题所在，有针对性提高和改正。

考前15天：限时写作，每天一到两篇，提高写作的感觉和速度。

F. 求一篇雅思英语作文(づ￣ ³￣)づ You are allowed 40 minutes to w

2007年6月CET作文题目
Part I Writing (30 minutes)
注意：此部分试题在答题卡1上。
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Welcome to our club. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given bellow:
欢迎辞，欢迎加入俱乐部。
标题：Welcome to our club
书写提纲：
1.表达你的欢迎；
2.对你们俱乐部作一个简要介绍。
2007年12月CET作文题目
Part I Writing (30 minutes)
What electives to choose
1. 各大学开设了各种各样的选修课
2. 学生因为各种原因选择了不同的选修课
3. 以你自己为例……
2008年6月CET作文题目
一.写作部分（9：00－9：30）
Part Ⅰ Writing (30 minutes)
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A Letter of Apology according to the outline given below. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese.
1.娱乐活动多种多样
2.娱乐活动可能使人们受益，也可能有危害性
3.作为大学生，我的看法。
2008年12月CET作文题目
1. 一次性塑料袋给人们生活带来便利。 广为使用。
2.由此带来的问,举例子。
3.限制使用塑料袋的意义,理论与实际相结合。
2009年6月CET作文题目
1.越来越多的博物馆免费开放的目的是什么？
2.也会带来一些问题
3.你的看法

G. 雅思英语作文

建议首先可以参加培训班，上完课后要整理笔记，总结开头-主体段落-结论的具回体写法以及常用答的语言结构。

考前50~60天，练习句子翻译考前40天，练习观点和词汇：挑选各个专题的话题若干，每天训练观点和词汇构思+段落写作；

考前30天：以熟练为主，完成写作训练。结合上课教授的写作方法和思路+每天构思得来的观点——不限时写作（每两天一篇）。

考前20天：挑选三种文体的代表作，请老师批改并面授点评，看看问题所在，有针对性提高和改正。

考前15天：限时写作，每天一到两篇，提高写作的感觉和速度。

H. 求一篇雅思英语作文~~急用啊！280字左右。

The view of new technology taking place of the old ones.

The new will take the place of the old sooner or later,so in my eyes it is acceptable and normal that the new-born technology has superseded those old ones.In the field of media ,as a matter of fact,more and more people use E-mail instead of writting a letter.Also you could find that newspaper become less popular among the teenagers,they are more likely to surf the internet to get touch with the information around the world.And these days In China the government has already carried out the plan that replace the analog signals with digital signals for TV（模拟信号向数字信号转变）.You could also find that more and more people are carrying their own laptops to work,and they just become smaller and faster.In a word, the whole world is moving toward a more advanced level,so it is to the technology.It is a rather good phenomena that more and more technologies are born in this world.So it is a unstoppable trend that the new take the place of the old.I think rather optimistic to this question.