批改六级英语作文

Ⅰ 英语作文批改

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Ⅱ 帮我批改下英语作文，按六级的标准

Drink Driving has been one of the most risky factors to public safety. Every effort should be applied to bring such incidence to the end. We share the responsibility with the authority to fight it.

First, more rigorous law should be enacted to punish those offenders to the maximum. Drink driving brakes laws! Second, law enforcement should carry the most advanced equipment to promptly check the Blood Alcohol Content (BAC) in the suspects. Last but not the least, we, the average citizen, should keep safety in mind all the time. We should watch around and act out in case we catch someone is going to do this dangerous behavior.

In my opinion, it is everybody’ responsibility to promote traffic safety. Increased awareness of traffic safety issues will help to bring a more safe community.

Ⅲ 批改英语作文

这应该是信吧？首先开头要有时间和DEAR_______。
几处语法错误：good at 只能就doing.（I'm good at sdying）
like to take with classmates（此处缺主语，take应改为talk。）
My deskmate does study hard（does study连续两个动词出现，明显错误。应去掉does，study+s。）obey school rules（obey+S）
His charcter isn't sunny,which make him too shy to communicate with people.（连接词错误，如要用which应放在charcter后，此处应用it ，后面的make+s）
he will lose his temper sometimes when meeting some incidents.(此处的will lose不合理，说的是他的性格，也就是平常的状态。故应用一般现在时（loses)
what I should do to improve our relationship(improve用在此处不是很恰当。应改为make ......better）
结尾处应对他/她表示感谢如：THANK YOU FOR YOUR HELP
祝语
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Ⅳ 求大神批改英语作文

题目有拼写错误

In recent years, more and more people migrate to another country.
批改意见：more and more可以改为 an increasing number of

For instance,some stars,business men and the millionaire migrate to another country.
批改意见：stars, business men和millionaire 的并列性不太强，需要替换。migrate to another country与前文重复，可以替换为choose to immigrate into foreign countries.

What’s the reasons for this phenomenon.
批改意见：没有问号……what's 应该为what are，注意主(reasons)谓(are)一致的问题。 句子可以考虑修改为What has led to the tend of migration?

First of all ,domestic environment become worse,such as haze weather and sandstorm weather.
批改意见：觉得这个高级词汇使用上有点泛滥。国内的环境，雾霾天气，沙尘暴天气……这里的表达都非常的Chinglish。还不如改成，There is more extreme weather than before over the nation, such as sandstorms and severe smog. severe smog这个是我查BBCnews的表述，感觉比较native

And some big city’s traffic is heavy,population continues rise at the speed of 2 million people every year.
批改意见：还是表达很中国式英语的问题。建议改成The traffic in many cities is in poor condition because of numerous private cars. And the domestic population has started to climb sharply, increasing to 2 million annually.

Secondly,another country’s environment is better. Moveover,their policy of people is more humanized.
批改意见：怎么都是中文直译的感觉。要习惯native说话的语序。而且我觉得环境好这个理由有点牵强，毕竟世界上哪里都有环境好的地方和污染中的地方，考虑替换另外一个理由。moreover拼写错误。后面这一句Chinglish again，令我不禁怀疑这不会是翻译软件辅助的吧……而且什么their policy？从英语角度考虑，这个they根本无从指向。而且这个理由写得太sharp了，要是中国老师would probably want you to get real bad hurt.- -句子整句大修！考虑修改为Moreover, some foreign countries have better legal system so that indivial rights could be fully respected. 句子意思意会一下就可以了。

So people want to migrate to there.
批改意见：migrate to there低级错误。整个表达非常不可接受。For these reasons, quite a few people prefer to migrating to another country rather than staying in their home country。

Last but not the least,many people migrate to another country in order to follow the trend,They think migrate toanother country is also the symbol of reputation and wealth,so do they.
批改意见：Chinglish，不想重复了。Last but not least, many people choose abroad, following the trend of migration, most of whom think that migration is trappings of fame as well as wealth.

In general,I contend the idea that we should stay in China. because China is a friendly country, she is our mother.
批改意见：我只是不喜欢这个句式而已……感觉就是用得太死板了。尽管是标准六级作文句式。我个人认为，语句流畅是很重要的。平时多点阅读，培养语感。为什么不喜欢这一句，是因为这个句式和前文的搭配感觉不和谐。……对，不……和……谐……读起来特别别扭。标点什么的就不吐槽了。because前后因果关系不强，比较牵强。In general,I contend the idea that we should stay in China because China is our motherland, the most wonderful and historical country ever.

Although she has many disadvantages,we can help her to solve theproblems.And I believe that she will be better in the future...
批改意见：这句话要是批改老师看到了可能会骂一句熊孩子……好吧虽然我不是老师但我已经骂了。除了机器直译这个蛋疼的东西，就是这两句话所表达的意思……orz……不吐槽。Yet much else is discouraging，with lots of problems unsolved, our country is definitely worth our devotion to make it a better place.

总评：整篇文章的结构不是很清晰，需要分段，并且使用更多恰当的衔接过度的词语。第三部分“我的看法”可以写多一点，因为这篇文章是很清晰的三段式。分析原因的地方内容写得不是很好，很空洞，没有什么实际的原因列出。内容也是很重要的！至于句子一些细节在上边已经提到了，希望要好好注意！应该要重点表现的第三部分竟然这么短实在是很令人失望。要合理安排篇章的分布。

希望你写作文可以有更大的进步！

看了很久打了很久，很认真的写完了。

希望可以采纳了哦亲~~~

Ⅳ 英语作文 批改

以我来看，有很多错的字，有很多错别字。还有语法在很多地方都错。但我使用美国学校的水平来改。
大概60-65吧

Ⅵ 跪求批改英语作文，CET-4

I was so excited when Iwas admitted to XX College that I picked up my package at once and booked aticket to school immediately.
College is quitedifferent from my middle school which area is the largest I ever seen.
There are so manysorts of courses provide me interests, such as Advanced Mathematics, the Theoryof Chinese Growth, and so on. All of these courses were taught so vividly thatI have to express my thanks to our lovely teachers. Among them, the ComputerProgram Design, an optional course, impressed me the most which I took part inwith full confidence.
What’ depressed mewas the result that I failed to design my program through all kinds ofknowledge learned from class with good combination. Despite of this, it’s mylucky to take part in the class since from which I got the most precious giftfor my future: Combining the knowledge is necessary to learn something truly well.

Ⅶ 求批改 英语作文

删 a
Should college ecation focus.....

At first,one’s imagination dominates one’s creativity
改成：At first, imagination nurtures one’s creativity

Where you can stay depends on where you think you can
改成：your mind decides where you are

Imagination is a ladder which leads us to the peak of our life.
改成：imagination is THE ladder that leads us to the pinnacle of life
如果你使用which，前面要用逗号隔开

In China, many colleges just focus on the basic facts and knowledge, neglecting what the society really needs, which is a critical reason that Chinese always lack masters and world-famous scientists while in China there are numerous talented teenagers.
改成：In China, many colleges just (focus on the basic facts and knowledge and neglect what the society really needs), which is a critical reason why Chinese still lack masters and world-famous scientists while talented teenagers are not in shortage.
( )内的句子，让后面的which修饰

Therefore, I made the conclusion that college ecation should focus on cultivating the imagination of students. For instance, professors can just put forward the hot issues for students and leave everything else for college students to investigate and create. Instead of setting up standard answers, professors should take their charge in valuing students’ work and giving constructive advice to students.
改成：Therefore, I conclude that college ecation should focus on cultivating the imagination of students. For instance, professors can just put forward hot issues to students, and let students improvise their own conclusions. Instead of setting up standard answers, professors should only asses students’ work and provide constructive advice to students.

Ⅷ 批改英语作文

craftsmanship，是针对一个人而言的手工艺技巧不能用，第二次用influence拼错了，society前面加版冠词，cloning才是克隆原型是clone，cloning作为权一种技术可以看做专有名词前面不建议加冠词，pay的是钱pay for的才是花钱的东西，regular作名词时指人，想说宇宙规律说universe不就好了吗，life time 是线性的lengthen它会更好，societ不存在的，改成social吧，最后的better没写完。整篇语法和词汇都很低级啊，最好用一些高级一点的词汇，不一定要很难的，比如both sides就比two sides好得多impact就比influence好得多。第二段第二句整句语法错误，可改成it is so helpful for medical treatments that mankind can live a longer life.(so that 和so ... that意思是分别是以便和如此...以至于，medical不能用作名词)

Ⅸ 求英语六级作文批改

你写的是一篇文章的全部，还是一部分？
总觉得开头的很突然，结尾的也很版突然。
开头权一般总得有点“引入”
结尾，总得有个结论，你写这篇文章的结论要明确的写出来，老师改卷子忙，没空细看。
英文作文就是开门见山，每段开头或结尾就要有句明显的总结该段的话，别和中文一样绕来绕去。有了中心句，再展开论述（理由），字数不够了再添点例子。。。。。

Ⅹ 求批改英语作文

with percentages of 18.80%, 16.36% and 15.77% in sequence.
要么把percentages of 去掉 要么把百分号去掉否则就是重复
in sequence去掉，因为前面已经有followed by了 这里意思又重复了

To talk about Clothing/Footwear, story is different.
显然用Talking about/of 结构更为规范，story前面的定冠词也漏了

Italy was the leading country with a rate of 9.00%, while Sweden was lagged behind with a relatively low percentage of 5.40%.
【rate】的用法不能这样用，应该改成 at the rate of 9:100 这个：号可以换成to
lag是不及物动词不能用被动 pecentage的问题不再说了。

The other three countries was in between with rates at around 6.50%.
这句话的表达无法理解。between后面有对象的话则必须是A and B. 你的between后面只有一个对象，已经错了。

Turkey was ranked No.1 the second time with a rate of 4.35%.
建议the second time的the改成a. 表示“再”的意味可以更明确
rank是不及物动词，用被动，错。

To draw a conclusion from the table
这个表达很不地道。直接In conclusion干脆舒服。

percentage is different in each column,
每个竖条百分数据不同。根据这个表达意思。建议改成percentages vary from column to column更好。你的原句少定冠词就不对，多了又感觉不舒服。

one thing was similar. It’s that consumers in all five countries spent most of their money on the item
可以去掉句号和it's改装成同位语从句。更为简洁和有语感